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TPO 46- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe v.4

TPO 46- The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe v. 4
The world is changing rapidly and people experience a huge improvement and development in several fields of science and engineering. In fact, they adjust themselves with these changes to live comfortably. When it comes to the impact of the opinions of celebrities on people, controversy surrounds the issue of whether it is more important to younger people than to older people? I am of the opinion that youths today do not find the attitudes of the celebrities important for their life and they follow different things like technology and new changes in the world instead. The following explanation will further elaborate on this perspective. One of the significant aspects of the ongoing discussion which demands a keen contemplation is that young people have other priorities to do in their life. They have to attend several classes and also study hard for their class assignments so that they can broaden their knowledge to understand the world better. Thus, they have no time to keep up with other people' s life or opinions. Take my personal experience for example. When I was in the high school, I rarely find enough time to watch TV or read newspaper to get the news even some time I had no time to talk to my parents just because of too many tasks teachers gave me to do. Another noteworthy aspect of the topic which needs to be reflected is that modern technology changes the attitudes of the youngsters toward the life. As a matter of fact, they have more tendencies to keep the pace with the modern inventions rather than other matters. Furthermore, young people have a great chance to know all information related to renowned people by using the internet and this unfolds many things, especially, other people' s attitudes about them, so they recognize that there are many negative points in their lives and they should not follow these people. Paradoxically, age factor can be considered as the main reason that youths somehow are affected by the celebrity’s opinions. In essence, they always think that celebrities are the ones who determine the fashion of the society, and they find their life more interesting because most of the celebrities are in their ages. In this regard, they imitate their styles of clothing or other things to keep up with the fashion. On the basis of the points mentioned above, I think that there are many convincing reasons for the fact that young people today do not follow celebrities opinions because they cannot find enough time to deal with other things and also they have more inclination to be informed with the technology changes and the new discoveries rather than other people' s attitudes.
The world is changing
rapidly
and
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people
experience a huge improvement and development in several fields of science and engineering. In fact, they adjust themselves with these
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changes
to
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live
comfortably
. When it
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comes
to the impact of the
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opinions
of
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celebrities
on
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people
, controversy surrounds the issue of whether it is more
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important
to younger
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people
than to older
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people
? I am of the
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opinion
that youths
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today
do not
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find
the
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attitudes
of the
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celebrities
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important
for their
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life and
they follow
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different
things like technology and new
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changes
in the world
instead
. The following explanation will
further
elaborate on this perspective.

One of the significant aspects of the ongoing discussion which demands a keen contemplation is that young
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people
have
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other
priorities to do in their
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life
. They
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have to
attend several classes and
also
study
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hard
for their
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class
assignments
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so
that they can broaden their knowledge to understand the world better.
Thus
, they have no
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time
to
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keep
up with
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other
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people&
#039; s
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life
or
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opinions
. Take my personal experience
for example
. When I was in the high school, I rarely
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find
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enough
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time
to
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watch
TV or read newspaper to
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get
the news even
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some
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time
I had no
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time
to talk to my parents
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just
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because
of too
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many
tasks teachers gave me to do.

Another noteworthy aspect of the topic which needs to
be reflected
is that modern technology
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changes
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
attitudes
of the youngsters toward the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
. As a matter of fact, they have more tendencies to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the pace with the modern inventions
rather
than
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other
matters.
Furthermore
, young
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people
have a great chance to know all information related to renowned
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people
by using the internet and this unfolds
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many
things,
especially
,
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other
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people&
#039; s
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attitudes
about them,
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so
they recognize that there are
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many
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negative
points in their
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lives and
they should not follow these
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people
.

Paradoxically
, age factor can
be considered
as the main reason that youths somehow are
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affected
by the
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celebrity’s
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opinions
. In essence, they always
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that
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celebrities
are the ones who determine the fashion of the society, and they
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find
their
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life
more interesting
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because
most of the
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celebrities
are in their ages. In this regard, they imitate their styles of clothing or
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other
things to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
up with the fashion.

On the basis of the points mentioned above, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
convincing reasons for the fact that young
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
do not follow
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celebrities
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opinions
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because
they cannot
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find
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enough
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time
to deal with
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other
things and
also
they have more inclination to
be informed
with the technology
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changes
and the new discoveries
rather
than
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other
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people&
#039; s
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attitudes
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay TPO 46- The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
449 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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