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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Employers should be required to provide smoking areas for their employees who smoke cigarettes. v.269

Employers should be required to provide smoking areas for their employees who smoke cigarettes. v. 269
Many people love to spend their life in an adventurous way by doing various things. However, some people like to persist whatever they do in their daily life. In my opinion, changes are the natural part of the world. Nothing remains same as it is, so why do we need to remain the same, if a change is happening to turn the wrong things to right. First, we need to understand that everything around the world change. For example, even the climate has not been remain the same, there has been a slight shift noticed in the rise of the temperature. A desert place is turning into a fertile place. So, it also applies to the human. If you do something other than your daily habit, you learn a lot. For example, you get to meet with new people and learn about their way of life. Second, suppose, if you are solving a software related problem and you are keep doing mistakes because you are not avoiding your same logic, in that case, it is required for you to think out of the box and make things right. We cannot make things better by following the same path, without any changes. Even old scientific theories have been reformed and some big problems have been solved afterwards like in the case of Einstein Theory of Relativity. In conclusion. I am in favour of the changes that happen and should happen around you if it is not causing any harm to you and others because you should not live your life in a bored and a monotonous way.
Many
people
love
to spend their life
in an adventurous way
by doing various things.
However
,
some
people
like to persist whatever they do in their daily life. In my opinion,
changes
are the natural part of the world. Nothing remains same as it is,
so
why do we need to remain the same, if a
change
is happening to turn the
wrong
things to right.

First
, we need to understand that everything around the world
change
.
For example
, even the climate has not been
remain
the same, there has been a slight shift noticed in the rise of the temperature. A desert place is turning into a fertile place.
So
, it
also
applies to
the human. If you do something other than your daily habit, you learn a lot.
For example
, you
get
to
meet
with new
people
and learn about their way of life.

Second, suppose, if you are solving a software related problem and you are
keep
doing mistakes
because
you are not avoiding your same logic,
in that case
, it
is required
for you to
think
out of the box and
make
things right. We cannot
make
things better by following the same path, without any
changes
. Even
old
scientific theories have
been reformed
and
some
big
problems have
been solved
afterwards like in the case of Einstein Theory of Relativity.

In conclusion
. I am in
favour
of the
changes
that happen and should happen around you if it is not causing any harm to you
and others
because
you should not
live
your life in a bored and a monotonous way.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Employers should be required to provide smoking areas for their employees who smoke cigarettes. v. 269

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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