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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People who benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. v.232

People who benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. v. 232
It is often argued that vehicle that utilizes fossil fuel for its operation should not be used and electric cars should be employed as a substitute. I completely agree that fossil fuelled cars should be prohibited and electric car should be used because it does not cause pollution and it is economical. Electric cars do not cause pollution to the environment that is why it should be used. The car uses electricity to operate and it does not emit carbon dioxide. Thus, carbon footprint will be eliminated, resulting in a cleaner air and the environment. Prime examples of these are the cars that are manufactured by Tesla Company. Their car products use batteries to store electric energy. In contrast, fossil fueled car emits harmful byproducts like carbon dioxide that pollutes the air. It is truly necessary to use electric cars to lessen air pollution and cleaner surroundings. Furthermore, electric cars are economical to use. The cost of electricity to operate is cheaper than fossil fueled car. This is because electricity is produced through a cost effective way like windmill, hydroelectric power plant and solar panel. In a study conducted by a non- Government group, Vehicle Efficiency, the average operating cost is five dollars per kilometre while their fossil fueled car counterpart is fifteen dollars per kilometre. Using electric cars is truly a great way to save money. In conclusion, electric powered car is environmental friendly because it does not emit carbon dioxide and using such car is cost efficient. This type of car should be used and fossil fuelled vehicles should be prohibited.
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argued that vehicle that utilizes
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fuel for its operation should not be
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electric
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cars
should
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as a substitute. I completely
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that
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fuelled
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car
should be
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because
it does not cause pollution and it is economical.

Electric
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cars
do not cause pollution to the environment
that is
why it should be
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used
. The
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car
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electricity to operate and it does not emit
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carbon
dioxide.
Thus
,
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footprint will
be eliminated
, resulting in a cleaner air and the environment. Prime examples of these are the
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are manufactured
by Tesla
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. Their
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products
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batteries to store
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energy.
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emits harmful byproducts like
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dioxide that pollutes the air. It is
truly
necessary to
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use
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to lessen air pollution and cleaner surroundings.

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are economical to
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. The
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of electricity to operate is cheaper than
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fueled
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car
. This is
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effective way like windmill, hydroelectric power plant and solar panel. In a study conducted by a non-
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Government
group, Vehicle Efficiency, the average operating
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cost
is five dollars per
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kilometre
while their
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fossil
fueled
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car
counterpart is fifteen dollars per
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kilometre
. Using
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is
truly
a great way to save money.

In conclusion
,
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electric
powered
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car
is environmental friendly
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because
it does not emit
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carbon
dioxide and using such
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is
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cost efficient
. This type of
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car
should be
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used
and
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fossil
fuelled vehicles should
be prohibited
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay People who benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. v. 232

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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