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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students benefit more from classes with a large number of students than they do from smaller classes. Use specific examples and details to support your opinion. v.212

Students benefit more from classes with a large number of students than they do from smaller classes. Use specific examples and details to support your opinion. v. 212
Many aver group activities are more beneficial for personal development than activities that are done alone. I personally disagree with this prospect and below some reasons on which my opinion is based will be discussed in details. On the one hand, team activities have many benevolent facets. Firstly, participating in such games as football, baseball and basketball allow folks to learn how to be a part of a team when a common goal to win and to conquer a rival team becomes more important than personal achievements. In fact, this skill is essential for being successful in today’s workplace. Secondly, doing group activities such as a big project or a pivotal assignment provides a person with an indispensable opportunity to lead and to be led by others. Consequently, an individual acquires valuable experience and new models of conduct that will be useful later in life. On the other hand, there are people who point to many advantages that can be gotten through playing alone. Primarily, the development of such a crucial personal characteristic as independence is attributed to studying or doing another activity on one’s own. This ability appears to be essential for being prosperous because only this kind of people is capable of leading other and achieving high goals. To sum up, although team activities indeed forge some useful and positively perceived skills for life, doing such activities that do not require participation of others creates wilful and independent people and provides them with a large set of important personal skills that are beneficial for life as well. So, it seems both types of activities are equally important.
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are more beneficial for
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personal
development than
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have
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many
benevolent facets.
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, participating in such games as football, baseball and basketball
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allow
folks to learn how to be a part of a
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team
when a common goal to win and to conquer a rival
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team
becomes more
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important
than
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personal
achievements. In fact, this
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skill
is essential for being successful in
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today
’s workplace.
Secondly
, doing group
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activities
such as a
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big
project or a pivotal assignment provides a person with an indispensable opportunity to lead and to
be led
by others.
Consequently
, an individual acquires valuable experience and new models of conduct that will be useful later in life.

On the
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other
hand, there are
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people
who point to
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advantages that can
be gotten
through playing alone.
Primarily
, the development of such a crucial
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personal
characteristic as independence
is attributed
to studying or doing another
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activity
on one’s
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own
.

This ability appears to be essential for being prosperous
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only
this kind of
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people
is capable of leading
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other
and achieving high goals.

To sum up, although
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team
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activities
indeed
forge
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some
useful and
positively
perceived
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skills
for life, doing such
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activities
that do not require participation of others creates
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wilful
and independent
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people
and provides them with a large set of
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important
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personal
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skills
that are beneficial for life
as well
.
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So
, it seems both types of
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activities
are
equally
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.
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IELTS essay Students benefit more from classes with a large number of students than they do from smaller classes. Use specific examples and details to support your opinion. v. 212

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
269 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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