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Q5. 11 The man didn't have time to study for biology test because his car broke down. The two people talk about the man's problem. Describe the problem and state which of the two solutions you prefer and why. v.1

Q5. 11 The man didn't have time to study for biology test because his car broke down. The two people talk about the man's problem. Describe the problem and state which of the two solutions you prefer and why. v. 1
Owing to the burgeoning modernizations, as both of the parents are working these days, children spend most of their time in the company of grandparents. Although teenagrs can develop deep relationship with grandparents and seem to be more amiable, there are also some drawbacks to be taken into account. Firstly, the benefit of children to spend their quality time with the elderly is that this would encourage the trans-generational bonds and make them rational. In other words, as childhood is the formative period of life, spending time with the elderly develops a soft corner inside them, which, in turn, helps them to get rid of ageist views in their adult life. A recent study conducted by UNICEF revealed that minors who spent the early years with the people of older generations are found to have kind heart towards them. Secondly, children would become more sociable and show less signs of emotional and behavioural issues. For this reason, it is always an imperative to let juveniles spend their time with elderly instead of sending them to caretaker. On the other hand, one problem with this idea is that some grandparents feel confined to the four walls of the house. To explain, as many elderly want to be independent and spend their lives in their own company, they find this confinement as a constrain on their freedom. As a result, they are not able to live their life to the fullest in the evening years. Another possible issue is that sometimes there are understanding issues with the generation gap. Many college-goers, for instance, show hard feelings for their elderly because of the restrictions faced by them in their early life. Therefore, when grandparents force certain restrictions on children, it makes them rebellious in nature. To conclude, while teenagers can benefit from spending quality time with their grandparents, it can also make them agitated in real-life.
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modernizations
, as both of the parents are working these days,
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children
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spend
most of their
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time
in the
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company
of
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grandparents
. Although
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teenagrs
can develop deep relationship with
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grandparents
and seem to be more amiable, there are
also
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some
drawbacks to
be taken
into account.

Firstly
, the benefit of
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children
to
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spend
their quality
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time
with the
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elderly
is that this would encourage the trans-generational bonds and
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make
them rational.
In other words
, as childhood is the formative period of
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life
, spending
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time
with the
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elderly
develops a soft corner inside them, which, in turn,
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helps
them to
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get
rid of ageist views in their adult
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life
. A recent study conducted by UNICEF revealed that minors who spent the early years with the
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people
of older generations
are found
to have kind heart towards them.
Secondly
,
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children
would become more sociable and
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show
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less
signs of emotional and
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behavioural
issues.
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, it is always an imperative to
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let
juveniles
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spend
their
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time
with
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elderly
instead
of sending them to caretaker.

On the other hand
, one problem with this
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idea
is that
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some
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grandparents
feel confined to the four walls of the
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house
. To
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explain
, as
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many
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elderly
want to be independent and
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spend
their
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lives
in their
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own
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company
, they find this confinement as a
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constrain
on their freedom.
As a result
, they are not able to
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live
their
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life
to the fullest in the evening years. Another possible issue is that
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sometimes
there
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are understanding
issues with the generation gap.
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college-goers,
for instance
,
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show
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hard
feelings for their
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elderly
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because
of the restrictions faced by them in their early
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life
.
Therefore
, when
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grandparents
force certain restrictions on
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children
, it
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makes
them rebellious in nature.

To conclude
, while
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teenagers
can benefit from spending quality
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time
with their
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grandparents
, it can
also
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make
them agitated in real-life.
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IELTS essay Q5. 11 The man didn't have time to study for biology test because his car broke down. The two people talk about the man's problem. Describe the problem and state which of the two solutions you prefer and why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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