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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Students benefit more from classes with a larger number of students than they do from smaller classes. Use specific examples and details to support your opinion v.374

Students benefit more from classes with a larger number of students than they do from smaller classes. Use specific examples and details to support your opinion v. 374
It is true that there is a high rate of recidivism when the sinners are emancipated from prison. Although there will undoubtedly be causes for this trend, societies can take steps to mitigate these potential problems. There are some reasons why criminals break the law when set free. The bottom line is the society’s segregation towards ex-prisoners. The public is often afraid that offenders can pose a threat to them and their beloved. For example, my neighbour, who had a dysfunctional childhood, was convicted of drug trafficking. After being discharged, he was shunned by those around him. As a result, he put up with a sense of alienation, which gave rise to his offending and a life sentence. In addition, ex-prisoners have a tendency to be unemployed when they are back to the community. In many cases, employers decline their CV by virtue of their bad track record. Therefore, while living below the poverty line, they have to resort to drug trafficking to at least live on a subsistence level. There are several actions that the government could take to solve the problems described above. Firstly, the government can launch philanthropic campaigns to raise public perception of ex-that, the public can have empathy for sinners and help them assimilate into society again to be intent on turning their lives around. Moreover, public and private sectors should be less stringent and give a chance to find an employment. Finally, offenders should be given more vocational education, including manual work or technical work so that they can make a living and deter themselves from being a recidivist. In conclusion, various measures can be taken to tackle the problems that criminals have a tendency to re-offend after being set free.
It is true that there is a high rate of recidivism when the sinners
are emancipated
from prison. Although there will
undoubtedly
be causes for this trend, societies can take steps to mitigate these potential problems.

There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
reasons why criminals break the law when set free. The bottom line is the society’s segregation towards ex-prisoners. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
afraid that offenders can pose a threat to them and their beloved.
For example
, my
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbour' is British English.
neighbour
, who had a dysfunctional childhood,
was convicted
of drug trafficking. After
being discharged
, he
was shunned
by those around him.
As a result
, he put up with a sense of alienation, which gave rise to his offending and a life sentence.
In addition
, ex-prisoners have a tendency to
be unemployed
when they are back to the community. In
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
cases, employers decline their CV by virtue of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
track
record.
Therefore
, while living below the poverty line, they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
resort to drug trafficking to at least
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
on a subsistence level.

There are several actions that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
could take to solve the problems
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
described
above.
Firstly
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can launch philanthropic campaigns to raise
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
perception of ex-that, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
can have empathy for sinners and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them assimilate into society again to be intent on turning their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
around.
Moreover
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
and private sectors should be less stringent and give a chance to find an employment.
Finally
, offenders should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
more vocational education, including manual work or technical work
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a living and deter themselves from being a recidivist.

In conclusion
, various measures can
be taken
to tackle the problems that criminals have a tendency to re-offend after
being set
free.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Students benefit more from classes with a larger number of students than they do from smaller classes. Use specific examples and details to support your opinion v. 374

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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