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TPO42 independent- Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

TPO42 independent- Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
In this essay, I will be exploring do people should stop using their mobile phones when they are with other people. I will show how much I agree with this opinion and why. I will give reasons and examples to support my arguments, as well. Nowadays people increasingly using the mobile phone when they are with other people. Very often can be seen, people on their mobile phones in many different places, such as the streets, public transport or restaurants during the lunch. This frequent use of mobiles maybe is sometimes caused a negative impact, especially of our social relationship. However, it is thought that is overstating opinion. First of all, people use their mobile, call up, but not excessively. This is because the rules of politeness still exist in the social life. For example; is not unusual to see people in a cafe or restaurant which speaking together, while their mobile phone still leaves on the table. It is important to mention, how big convenience give mobile phones to afford us. We have contact with important for us people all time. For example; if someone is going to arrive late to a meeting, they can simply send a text message to other people which waiting. So, the mobile dial helps us with communication with other people. Taking everything into account, in my opinion, the argument that people should stop using their mobile phones when they are with other people is far too overstated. Mobile contact is a part of our life and can be used while we meet with others.
In this essay, I will be exploring do
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stop
using their mobile
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phones
when they are with
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other
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people
. I will
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show
how much I
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agree
with this opinion and why. I will give reasons and examples to support my arguments,
as well
.

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people
increasingly
using the mobile
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phone
when they are with
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other
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people
.
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often
can be
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seen
,
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people
on their mobile
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phones
in
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many
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different
places, such as the streets, public transport or restaurants during the lunch. This frequent
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use
of mobiles maybe is
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sometimes
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negative
impact,
especially
of our social relationship.
However
, it is
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thought
that is
overstating opinion.

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people
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use
their mobile, call up,
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but
not
excessively
. This is
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because
the
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rules
of politeness
still
exist in the social life.
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; is not unusual to
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see
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people
in a
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or restaurant which speaking together, while their mobile
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phone
still
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leaves
on the table.

It is
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important
to mention, how
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big
convenience give mobile
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phones
to afford us. We have contact with
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important
for us
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people
all time.
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; if someone is going to arrive late to a meeting, they can
simply
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send
a text message to
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other
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people
which waiting.
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So
, the mobile dial
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helps
us with communication with
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other
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people
.

Taking everything into account, in my opinion, the argument that
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people
should
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stop
using their mobile
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phones
when they are with
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other
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people
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is
far too overstated. Mobile contact is a part of our life and can be
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used
while we
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meet
with others.
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IELTS essay TPO42 independent- Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
261 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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