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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? "Children aged 15 and above should be allowed to vote". Use specific details and examples to show why you agree or disagree. v.210

"Children aged 15 and above should be allowed to vote". Use specific details and examples to show why you agree or disagree. v. 210
People are prone to congestion issues and life-threatening for everyone's life, even the bicycle rides and pedestrians as well as afraid of cutting trees and removing greenery places for bridges. In this essay I will discuss the negative repercussions and figure out the solution of people satisfaction. On the one hand, there are two major reasons why folks believe that they make use of the green land property for bridges that are harmful to the atmosphere. Moreover, vehicles spew obnoxious gases into the surroundings, which arouses the major health problems. As a result, children are associated with ailments such as asthma, lung and so on. The second reason for this is that, the bicycle rides are associated with hazardous troubles of cycling the road due to the heavy traffic, folks do not like to travel on the road. To exemplify, by not obeying the traffic rules, the cycle rides having troubles of an accident. On the contrary, it is counterclaimed that the remedial measures of this issue are the way the government has to prioritize expenditure for constructing cycle paths or even devote the green places for riding, as well as this, the government should plant plants than the removing for the special purposes. If the atmosphere becomes less polluted everyone likes to live life freely. Further and even more, the bureaucrat should impose the new policy of vehicles or using public facilities rather than using their private vehicles. By the way of conclusion, I believe that everyone should be followed by the authorities' law so that the masses become more satisfied with nature. Also, the pedestrian and cycle riders feel safe.
People
are prone to congestion issues and life-threatening for everyone's life, even the bicycle rides and pedestrians
as well
as afraid of cutting trees and removing greenery places for bridges. In this essay I will discuss the
negative
repercussions and figure out the solution of
people
satisfaction.

On the one hand, there are two major reasons why folks believe that they
make
use
of the green land property for bridges that are harmful to the atmosphere.
Moreover
, vehicles spew obnoxious gases into the surroundings, which arouses the major health problems.
As a result
, children
are associated
with ailments such as asthma, lung and
so
on. The second reason for this is that, the bicycle rides
are associated
with hazardous troubles of cycling the road due to the heavy traffic, folks do not like to travel on the road.

To exemplify, by not obeying the traffic
rules
, the cycle rides having troubles of an accident.

On the contrary
, it
is counterclaimed
that the remedial measures of this issue are the way the
government
has to
prioritize expenditure for constructing cycle paths or even devote the green places for riding,
as well
as this, the
government
should plant plants than the removing for the special purposes. If the atmosphere becomes less polluted everyone likes to
live
life
freely
.
Further
and even more, the bureaucrat should impose the new policy of vehicles or using public facilities
rather
than using their private vehicles.

By the way of conclusion, I believe that everyone should
be followed
by the authorities' law
so
that the masses become more satisfied with nature.
Also
, the pedestrian and cycle riders feel safe.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay "Children aged 15 and above should be allowed to vote". Use specific details and examples to show why you agree or disagree. v. 210

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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