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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain yo v.202

Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain yo v. 202
Human lives in any part of the world, food are the basic need survivor. In the current earth, there are lots of the issues but one of the major concerns of the world is the growing demand for food. These issues are initiated due to increasing in population and the extreme change in climatic condition. The growing demand for the food caused by the increase in population of the world. As per specialist’s world population is expected to increase by 2 billion in next 10 years, but unfortunately, food production has not kept on that pace. Climatic changes happening due to various reasons like weakening of the ozone layer, acid rain and global warming have led to a decrease in the production of food. However, this situation could be improved by farmers by increasing the area under cultivation and by using improved farming techniques. For example, yield can be increased by using quality fertilizers, improved methods of irrigation and modern techniques called precision farming. In addition to this, the government needs to take active participation in educating farmers about the use of such techniques and products. The international community also needs to step in. Countries where food is surplus must show the willingness to export it to poor countries at a nominal price. This will ensure that everyone irrespective of their financial situation or nationality has access to three square meals a day. In conclusion, though population is increasing and climatic changes have damaged the current supply of food by using improved farming techniques and bringing more area under cultivation, food production can be stimulated.
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lives
in any part of the
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world
,
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food
are the basic need survivor. In the
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current
earth, there are lots of the issues
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but
one of the major concerns of the
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world
is the growing demand for
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food
. These issues
are initiated
due to increasing in
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population
and the extreme
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change
in climatic condition.

The growing demand for the
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food
caused by the increase in
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population
of the
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world
. As per specialist’s
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world
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population
is
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expected
to increase by 2 billion in
next
10 years,
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but
unfortunately,
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food
production has not
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kept
on that pace. Climatic
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changes
happening due to various reasons like weakening of the ozone layer, acid rain and global warming have led to a decrease in the production of food.

However
, this situation could be
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improved
by farmers by increasing the area under cultivation and by using
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improved
farming
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techniques
.
For example
, yield can
be increased
by using quality fertilizers,
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improved
methods of irrigation and modern
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techniques
called precision farming.
In addition
to this, the
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government
needs to take active participation in educating farmers about the
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use
of such
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techniques
and products. The international community
also
needs to step in. Countries where
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food
is surplus
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must
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show
the willingness to export it to poor countries at a nominal price. This will ensure that everyone irrespective of their financial situation or nationality has access to three square meals a day.

In conclusion
, though
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population
is increasing and climatic
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changes
have damaged the
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current
supply of
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food
by using
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improved
farming
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techniques
and bringing more area under cultivation,
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food
production can
be stimulated
.
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IELTS essay Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain yo v. 202

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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