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“Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a fundamental subject whether or not it is used later in life. ” Discuss both sides. v.3

“Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a fundamental subject whether or not it is used later in life. ” v. 3
Learning mathematics at school has become a topic of controversy between parents. While some parents believe that mathematics is a fundamental subject in education, others believe that it’s irrelevant and useless. In this essay we will demonstrate the point of view of each side. The number parents who believe that students should be exempted from learning mathematics at schools is continuously growing. They think that people don’t use mathematics in their daily life unless they are working in a related field; and, since, those work in a field related to mathematics learn it in depth in their universities, therefore, there is no need to force all students to study this complicated subject. We can take those who work in the translation domain as an example; the nature of their work is extremely far away from mathematics; thus they consider their study of math in their elementary stage of their education to be useless. Therefore, these parents who believe that math should not be a mandatory material have a reasonable point of view. On the other hand, there exist some parents who consider mathematics as an essential subject that should be taught in schools even if most of us do not practically use it. Their opinion is based upon the reason that mathematics is a mental exercise; in other words, they think that it improves the reasoning abilities of the learners. A typical example is those who learn UCMAS, a course that helps you perform all calculations without calculator, get rid of calculators in order to train their minds; hence, improve their calculating and mental abilities. Therefore, these individuals who believe that math is a fundamental study in all schools have a respectful mindset. Whether or not to teach mathematics at school is becoming increasingly debatable. There are two sides having opposite opinions regarding this topic: the first side considers mathematics as an outdated subject that should be cancelled from the schools’ curriculum, while the other one believe in the necessity of learning math despite its usefulness later in life. This essay discussed the various reasons why parents hold these points of view.
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is a fundamental
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in education, others
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that it’s irrelevant and useless. In this essay we will demonstrate the point of view of each side.

The number
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parents
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that students should
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is
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in their daily life unless they are working in a related field; and, since, those work in a field related to
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mathematics
learn it in depth in their universities,
therefore
, there is no need to force all students to study this complicated
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subject
. We can take those
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who
work in the translation domain as an example; the nature of their work is
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far away from
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mathematics
;
thus
they consider their study of
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math
in their elementary stage of their education to be useless.
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parents
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that
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should not be a mandatory material have a reasonable point of view.

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hand, there exist
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consider
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as an essential
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in
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even if most of us do not
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is a mental exercise; in
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words, they
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rid of calculators in order to train their minds;
hence
,
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their calculating and mental abilities.
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that
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is a fundamental study in all
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schools
have a respectful mindset.

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to teach
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mathematics
at
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school
is becoming
increasingly
debatable. There are two sides having opposite opinions regarding this topic: the
first
side considers
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mathematics
as an outdated
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subject
that should
be cancelled
from the
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schools’
curriculum, while the
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other
one
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believe
in the necessity of learning
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math
despite its usefulness later in life. This essay discussed the various reasons why
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parents
hold these points of view.
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IELTS essay “Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a fundamental subject whether or not it is used later in life. ” v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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