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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to solve the problems in the present and future, it is necessary to understand the past. v.174

In order to solve the problems in the present and future, it is necessary to understand the past. v. 174
These days, there is vast consumption of sugary drinks is included in our daily life routines, although everyone is much aware about the adverse effects of this act, but due to the negligence this become the real face of society. Some major factor of this approach are, Due to the shortage of timing and usage or ready-made items in our daily hectic schedules amplify these problems. As, if we look closer to our daily routines each one of us is having merely time to think or watch that what exactly they are consuming in terms of food or drinks. According to the reports of survey in the USA, the consumption of carbohydrate intake in our diet, especially drinks intake exceeded drastically in last 2 decades by 45 percentage. Additionally, on the other side, In our homes we are less active and serve our guests with ready-made market available juices, which contained sugar, however, I reckon that these are major factors contributing to the excess of sugar in our daily life. On the other hand, by conducting few preventive steps one can reduce the habit of drinking such unhealthy drinks. Firstly, the people should develop a habit to read all the contents of the soft drinks, which they are going to consume. Although, all the soft drinks are not having excessive sugar, they should choose such alternative products. Secondly, the parents should guide their adolescents not to imitate everything which is broadcasted on TV and newspaper advertisements and aware them about potential negative side of such products. Lastly, the government should run awareness campaigns throughout the country about healthy diet. For example, Fit India campaign has integrated many citizens towards healthy dietary. In conclusion, this is clear that, we have to be very keen on, what we are eating and whether this is beneficial for our body or not, While managing our daily routines smartly and avoid excess usage of sugar, as this badly affects our body in the long run.
These days, there is vast consumption of sugary
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drinks
is included
in our
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daily
life routines, although everyone is much aware about the adverse effects of this act,
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but
due to the negligence this become the real face of society.

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Some
major factor of this approach are, Due to the shortage of timing and usage or ready-made items in our
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daily
hectic schedules amplify these problems. As, if we look closer to our
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daily
routines each one of us is having
merely
time to
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think
or
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watch
that what exactly they are consuming in terms of food or
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drinks
. According to the reports of survey in the USA, the consumption of carbohydrate intake in our diet,
especially
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drinks
intake exceeded
drastically
in last 2 decades by 45 percentage.
Additionally
, on the other side, In our homes we are less active and serve our guests with ready-made market available juices, which contained
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sugar
,
however
, I reckon that these are major factors contributing to the excess of
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sugar
in our
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daily
life.

On the other hand
, by conducting few preventive steps one can
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reduce
the habit of drinking such unhealthy
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drinks
.
Firstly
, the
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people
should develop a habit to read all the contents of the soft
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drinks
, which they are going to consume. Although, all the soft
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drinks
are not having excessive
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sugar
, they should choose such alternative products.
Secondly
, the parents should guide their adolescents not to imitate everything which
is broadcasted
on TV and newspaper advertisements and aware them about potential
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negative
side of such products.
Lastly
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should run awareness campaigns throughout the country about healthy diet.
For example
, Fit India campaign has integrated
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many
citizens towards healthy dietary.

In conclusion
, this is
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clear
that, we
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have to
be
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very
keen on, what we are eating and whether this is beneficial for our body or not, While managing our
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daily
routines
smartly
and avoid excess usage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sugar
, as this
badly
affects our body in the long run.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In order to solve the problems in the present and future, it is necessary to understand the past. v. 174

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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