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do you agree or disagree? in order to solve the problems in the present and future, it is vital to understand the past. v.29

in order to solve the problems in the present and future, it is vital to understand the past. v. 29
It is observed that the number of people reading the news on the internet is rising. Despite this trend, it is argued that newspapers will remain a key source of information for the majority of people. This essay disagrees that newspapers will hold its position as a significant resource of news and information. Firstly, this essay will discuss the rapid growth in the use of internet-connected devices and secondly, it will discuss the rising awareness of reducing paper usage around the world. Today, everyone uses at least one internet-connected device e. g. Smartphones, tablets, laptops, or smart TVs, etc. Most of these devices have built-in news or social media applications that keep their users up to date with any local or international developments. It has become convenient for people to remain informed at any time without incurring any monetary cost as compared to reading newspapers. According to a report published by a journalist organization, 7 out of 10 people keep themselves informed of the current affairs through online news feeds and social media, and it is anticipated that in the coming years this number will be increased further. Secondly, a major quantity of paper produced today is made from trees in which every year millions of trees are cut off. This significantly accelerates the global warming process. Therefore, an awareness of reducing the unnecessary usage of paper as much as possible is on the rise. The majority of businesses, organizations, and governments discourage the use of paper in their day-to-day operations by using electronic channel e. g. Web portals and PDF documents. In this regard, well-known newspaper publishers around the globe have also contributed to the cause. For instance, several newspapers have launched their news websites and social media pages. This step has not only reduced the cost of printing newspapers for newspaper publishers, but also allowed them to retain their readership which prefers to remain updated online. In conclusion, this essay discards the idea that newspapers will remain a vital source of information because people have internet access as a more convenient and economical choice to remain informed as compared to read newspapers and they are more aware of minimizing paper usage than they were before.
It
is observed
that the number of
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people
reading the
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news
on the internet is rising. Despite this trend, it
is argued
that
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newspapers
will
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remain
a key source of information for the majority of
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people
. This essay disagrees that
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newspapers
will hold its position as a significant resource of
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news
and information.
Firstly
, this essay will discuss the rapid growth in the
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use
of internet-connected devices and
secondly
, it will discuss the rising awareness of reducing paper usage around the world.

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Today
, everyone
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uses
at least one internet-connected device
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e. g.
Smartphones, tablets, laptops, or smart TVs, etc. Most of these devices have built-in
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news
or social media applications that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
their users up to date with any local or international developments. It has become convenient for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
remain
informed at any time without incurring any monetary cost as compared to reading
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspapers
. According to a report published by a journalist organization, 7 out of 10
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
themselves informed of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
affairs through online
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news
feeds and social media, and it
is anticipated
that in the coming years this number will
be increased
further
.

Secondly
, a major quantity of paper produced
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today
is made
from trees in which every year millions of trees are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
off. This
significantly
accelerates the global warming process.
Therefore
, an awareness of reducing the unnecessary usage of paper as much as possible is on the rise. The majority of businesses, organizations, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
discourage the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of paper in their day-to-day operations by using electronic channel
There should be no space here: "e.g.".
e. g.
Web portals and PDF documents. In this regard, well-known
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspaper
publishers around the globe have
also
contributed to the cause.
For instance
, several
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspapers
have launched their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
websites and social media pages. This step has not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
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reduced
the cost of printing
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newspapers
for
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newspaper
publishers,
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but
also
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allowed
them to retain their readership which prefers to
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remain
updated online.

In conclusion
, this essay discards the
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idea
that
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newspapers
will
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remain
a vital source of information
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because
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people
have internet access as a more convenient and economical choice to
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remain
informed as compared to read
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
newspapers and
they are more aware of minimizing paper usage than they were
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before
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay in order to solve the problems in the present and future, it is vital to understand the past. v. 29

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
367 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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