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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should not have to pay for public transportation that they use. v.170

People should not have to pay for public transportation that they use. v. 170
Nowadays the obese has become the centre of health problems. The level of health and fitness is declining day to day due to increasing in the average weight of people. This essay will explain the lack of exercise and eating junk food are the causes of increasing in the average weight of humans and decline in the fitness of people in a few countries. It will also discuss the measures like walking and eating the vegetables should be taken to avoid these problems. To begin with, eating an unhealthy food has become the trend nowadays. People eat more junk food which results in an increment in the average weight of men. For example, a study suggests that consumption of excessive junk foods has caused the obesity in people, which has made a plethora of reduction in their fitness level. Secondly, the lack of exercise has made people lazier which eventually results an increase in the level of fats and carbohydrates. To illustrate this, a research study has been made by the health agency which says that the people who don’t exercise on a daily basis, they feel lazier and more become useless. Thus, these are the causes which eventually can make a drastic impact on human fitness and average weight. Meanwhile, the measure like eating green should be taken which can provide men and women an enormous amount of nutrition, which are required for good health. For instance, consumption of vegetables can provide all the nutrition which is required for the human body to function properly. Secondly, people must include walking in their daily routine because it makes them more active and energetic. For suppose, a study suggests that walking causes the burning of fats and calories which keeps people smart. Overall, eating the vegetables and walking keeps the people fit and helps them to overcome the obesity issue. To conclude, it is said that “health is wealth”. This essay has discussed the lack of training and eating junk foods are the causes of increasing in normal load of people and explained the measure like eating vegetables and walking can be used to tackle these cruxes.
Nowadays the obese has become the
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centre
of
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health
problems. The level of
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health
and
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fitness
is declining day to day due to increasing in the
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average
weight of
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people
. This essay will
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explain
the lack of exercise and
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eating
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junk
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food
are the
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causes
of increasing in the
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average
weight of humans and decline in the
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fitness
of
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people
in a few countries. It will
also
discuss the measures like walking and
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eating
the
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vegetables
should
be taken
to avoid these problems.

To
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begin
with,
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eating
an unhealthy
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food
has become the trend nowadays.
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People
eat more
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junk
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food
which results in an increment in the
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average
weight of
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men
.
For example
, a study suggests that consumption of excessive
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junk
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foods
has caused the obesity in
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people
, which has made a plethora of reduction in their
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fitness
level.
Secondly
, the lack of exercise has made
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people
lazier which
eventually
results an increase in the level of fats and carbohydrates. To illustrate this, a research study has
been made
by the
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health
agency which says that the
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people
who don’t exercise on a daily basis, they feel lazier and more become useless.
Thus
, these are the
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causes
which
eventually
can
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make
a drastic impact on human
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fitness
and
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average
weight.

Meanwhile, the measure like
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eating
green should
be taken
which can provide
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men
and women an enormous amount of nutrition, which
are required
for
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good
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health
.
For instance
, consumption of
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vegetables
can provide all the nutrition which
is required
for the human body to function
properly
.
Secondly
,
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people
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must
include walking in their daily routine
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because
it
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makes
them more active and energetic. For suppose, a study suggests that walking
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causes
the burning of fats and calories which
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keeps
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people
smart.
Overall
,
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eating
the
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vegetables
and walking
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keeps
the
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people
fit and
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helps
them to overcome the obesity issue.

To conclude
, it
is said
that
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“health
is wealth”. This essay has discussed the lack of training and
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eating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
junk
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foods
are the
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causes
of increasing in normal load of
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people
and
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explained
the measure like
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eating
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vegetables
and walking can be
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used
to tackle these cruxes.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay People should not have to pay for public transportation that they use. v. 170

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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