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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to buy a new technological device right away than to wait until others have adopted it. v.147

It is better to buy a new technological device right away than to wait until others have adopted it. v. 147
People in the past used to eat organic food and work hard on the farms, therefore they used to be fit, however, these days people just go to work and that is how they spend their entire day. Living in today's world means a great deal of stress, which we have to tackle. As a matter of fact, being healthy is generally a combination of mind and physical activity due to staying fit and calm. It is important for people to pay attention to their health by their diet and exercise, so they can live longer and better. Firstly, there is a great amount of variation between lifestyles in different cities, but most people are very busy with their jobs and earning money, in a way that they do not have time to spend for themselves so routinely, people prefer to join their daily life to a workout, for example, they would rather walk to work instead of using cars or taxis. Therefore, not only they stay healthy due to exercising, furthermore, they will save money on fuel or transportation. Secondly, in this day and age people are coping with a fair amount of stressful issues in their lives, so exercising and finding some ways to become calmer and eating a great meal after a busy day seems essential. In my country, public take yoga or aerobic classes to get relaxed and happy and try to consume healthy food such as vegetables, and there are some individuals who do simple workouts when they get enough time at home. Of course with the topography we have in Iran mountain climbing is a popular sport which has a great effect on a body and mind. To summarize, it is undeniable that we need to exercise more and more than people needed in the past. Not only we will be happy and relax, but also, we will stay fit by physical training and appropriate diet. In different cities or countries, people have different lifestyles and as a result different ways of exercising and eating. In my country, people try not to waste time and use it on exercising and they try to avoid unhealthy food in order to stay healthy.
People
in the past
used
to eat organic food and work
hard
on the farms,
therefore
they
used
to
be fit
,
however
, these days
people
just
go to work and
that is
how they spend their entire day. Living in
today
's world means a
great
deal of
stress
, which we
have to
tackle. As a matter of fact, being
healthy
is
generally
a combination of mind and physical activity due to staying fit and calm. It is
important
for
people
to pay attention to their health by their diet and exercise,
so
they can
live
longer and better.

Firstly
, there is a
great
amount of variation between lifestyles in
different
cities,
but
most
people
are
very
busy with their jobs and earning money, in a way that they do not have time to spend for themselves
so
routinely
,
people
prefer to
join
their daily life to a workout,
for example
, they would
rather
walk to work
instead
of using cars or taxis.
Therefore
, not
only
they stay
healthy
due to
exercising
,
furthermore
, they will save money on fuel or transportation.

Secondly
, in this day and age
people
are coping with a
fair
amount of stressful issues in their
lives
,
so
exercising
and finding
some
ways to become calmer and eating a
great
meal after a busy day seems essential. In my country, public take yoga or aerobic classes to
get
relaxed and happy and try to consume
healthy
food such as vegetables, and there are
some
individuals who do simple workouts when they
get
enough
time at home.
Of course
with the topography we have in Iran mountain climbing is a popular sport which has a
great
effect on a body and mind.

To summarize
, it is undeniable that we need to exercise more and more than
people
needed in the past. Not
only
we will be happy and relax,
but
also
, we will stay fit by physical training and appropriate diet. In
different
cities or countries,
people
have
different
lifestyles and
as a result
different
ways of
exercising
and eating. In my country,
people
try not to waste time and
use
it on
exercising and
they try to avoid unhealthy food in order to stay
healthy
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay It is better to buy a new technological device right away than to wait until others have adopted it. v. 147

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
367 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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