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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teaching students is more important for professors than doing research. v.149

Teaching students is more important for professors than doing research. v. 149
In this present-day of developed civilisation, science and technology have improved by leaps and bounds, which has led to increased annual consumption of various commodities, and their consequential disposal. However, simply discarding some of these wastes is harmful, and often hazardous to the very environment we live in, which calls for strict provisions for proper recycling of these scraps. In my opinion, many people fail to understand the environmental impact and the need of reusing our used commodities to avoid the disaster that their improper dumping can ensue, which I believe makes it a necessity for there to be stringent laws set by the governments to allow for optimum recycling of wastes by citizens of this country. Let us consider a scenario in which the mass discards their goods, which are not supposed to be dumped because of their environmental hazard, out in the nature, some very nasty outcome can be set into motion that can lead to banishing out the life from the entire planet surface. For instance, the chemical industries dump their heavy chemical substances into water bodies which has led to severe water pollution and there have been cases wherein, an entire school of fish was discovered to have poisonous chemicals in their system. Therefore, some rules implemented by the authorities that regulate safer reuse of these toxic materials can prove to be helpful for the ecosystem, and the organisms living in it. In another scenario, people living in cities and towns for example, very conveniently take care of their used as well as unused plastics and glasswares by throwing them away. These items are non-degradable and remain in the soil for an infinite duration of time leading to soil pollution, which in turn, results in loss of the forest cover and ultimately soil erosion. Thus, a set of laws incorporated by the higher-ups can penalize people who irresponsibly dump their commodities instead of properly recycling them, as stated by the law, in order to sustain the planet and its environment. In a nutshell, I believe that a series of robust as well as proficient waste management and recycling laws for either industrial or domestic based scraps can come in handy when it comes to preserving our ecosystem and the precious lives of various animals, including us, who inhabit it, as correctly stated by some people.
In this present-day of developed
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civilisation
, science and technology have
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improved
by leaps and bounds, which has led to increased annual consumption of various commodities, and their consequential disposal.
However
,
simply
discarding
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some
of these wastes is harmful, and
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often
hazardous to the
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very
environment we
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live
in, which calls for strict provisions for proper
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recycling
of these scraps. In my opinion,
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many
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people
fail to understand the environmental impact and the need of reusing our
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used
commodities to avoid the disaster that their improper dumping can ensue, which I believe
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makes
it a necessity for there to be stringent
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laws
set by the
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governments
to
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allow
for optimum
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recycling
of wastes by citizens of this country.

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Let
us consider a scenario in which the mass discards their
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goods
, which are not supposed to
be dumped
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because
of their environmental hazard, out in the nature,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
nasty outcome can
be set
into motion that can lead to banishing out the life from the entire planet surface.
For instance
, the chemical industries dump their heavy chemical substances into water bodies which has led to severe water pollution and there have been cases wherein, an entire school of fish
was discovered
to have poisonous chemicals in their system.
Therefore
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
implemented by the authorities that regulate safer reuse of these toxic materials can prove to be helpful for the ecosystem, and the organisms living in it.

In another scenario,
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people
living in cities and towns
for example
,
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very
conveniently
take care of their
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used
as well
as unused plastics and
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glasswares
by throwing them away. These items are non-degradable and remain in the soil for an infinite duration of time leading to soil pollution, which in turn, results in loss of the forest cover and
ultimately
soil erosion.
Thus
, a set of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
incorporated by the higher-ups can penalize
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
irresponsibly
dump their commodities
instead
of
properly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
them, as stated by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
law
, in order to sustain the planet and its environment.

In a nutshell, I believe that a series of robust
as well
as proficient waste management and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
for either industrial or domestic based scraps can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
in handy when it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to preserving our ecosystem and the precious
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
of various animals, including us, who inhabit it, as
correctly
stated by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Teaching students is more important for professors than doing research. v. 149

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
389 words
7.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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