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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should not have to work or help with household tasks; their only responsibility should be to study. v.141

Children should not have to work or help with household tasks; their only responsibility should be to study. v. 141
It is widely held believe that museum entry fee should not be taken. But, there is a strong counter argument amongst a section of people that it should have some entry fees, however, I am of opinion that this is a matter that can be debated in light of several factors in reasonable conclusion can be drawn. The first and foremost reason is to provide an opportunity for everyone to visit at these kind of places. To be more precise, people who belong to below poverty line are always denied to visit at the Museum due to lack of money. Eventually, it increases the level of dominating society by providing, free of cost, then it makes it easier to reduce the determinants among these people. Another was mentioning reason is to get more chance of popularity worldwide. Because, it is free of cost, then more and more people were visiting there and able to enhance their knowledge about a specific Nation in the whole world which acts as an advertisement in front of others. For example, a survey carried by famous scientist Mr. Robinson, at University, New Zealand revealed that the museum at Amritsar "Punjab history" is increasing 80% popularity in five years by providing free entry. On the other side, there is a certain group of people who vehemently that entry fee should be there. Firstly, this amount is helpful for the maintenance of museums. Because, this building is costly to maintain properly. As well it can be demolished if it does not get more money. So, keeping entry fees is helpful in maintenance. Secondly, it helps to increase the economy of the nation. Because, the collection of this money helps to make an interactive structure of buildings, which definitely helpful to increase the tourism in the countries. Thus, tourism helps to boost economy directly. To conclude, after analysing both views I opine that museums should have some entry fee because Money helps in various ways for these buildings as well Nations.
It is
widely
held believe that
museum
entry
fee
should not
be taken
.
But
, there is a strong counter argument amongst a section of
people
that it should have
some
entry
fees
,
however
, I am of opinion that this is a matter that can
be debated
in light of several factors in reasonable conclusion can
be drawn
.

The
first
and foremost reason is to provide an opportunity for everyone to visit at
these kind
of places. To be more precise,
people
who belong to below poverty line are always
denied to visit
at the
Museum
due to lack of
money
.
Eventually
, it increases the level of dominating society by providing, free of cost, then it
makes
it easier to
reduce
the determinants
among
these
people
. Another was mentioning reason is to
get
more chance of popularity worldwide.
Because
, it is free of cost, then more and more
people
were visiting there and able to enhance their knowledge about a specific Nation in the whole world which acts as an advertisement in front of others.
For example
, a survey carried by
famous
scientist Mr. Robinson, at University, New Zealand revealed that the
museum
at Amritsar
"
Punjab history
"
is increasing 80% popularity in five years by providing free entry.

On the other side, there is a certain group of
people
who
vehemently
that
entry
fee
should be there.
Firstly
, this amount is helpful for the maintenance of
museums
.
Because
, this building is costly to maintain
properly
. As
well it
can
be demolished
if it does not
get
more
money
.
So
, keeping
entry
fees
is helpful in maintenance.
Secondly
, it
helps
to increase the economy of the nation.
Because
, the collection of this
money
helps
to
make
an interactive structure of buildings, which definitely helpful to increase the tourism in the countries.
Thus
, tourism
helps
to boost economy
directly
.

To conclude
, after
analysing
both views I opine that
museums
should have
some
entry
fee
because
Money
helps
in various ways for these buildings
as well
Nations.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Children should not have to work or help with household tasks; their only responsibility should be to study. v. 141

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
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