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Do you age or disagree with the following statement? Children should not hace to work or help with household tasks; their only responsibility should be to study. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.2

Do you age or disagree with the following statement? Children should not hace to work or help with household tasks; their only responsibility should be to study. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 2
Some people say that it is not responsibility of the children to help their parents at home. They think that children should just study. Others believe otherwise. Children should help their father and mother at home. I think that children need to study, but it is not the unique responsibility. They have obligation of helping their parents with the tasks at home. My first reason is that children need to help their mother. What I mean is that while she is cooking rice, beans and salads, the kids may prepare the juice. For example, they can squeeze the oranges or lemons. They can prepare the table putting the dishes and glasses. Thus, the whole family needs just to sit and to have lunch or dinner. Moreover, children may help the father. In other words, he cleans the dinner room and stay room and the kids clean their bedrooms. For instance, they clean the flour, wall and organize the clothes, shoes in the wardrobe. Therefore, everybody shares tasks and helps each one with their duties at home. Finally, kids should work with their old brothers. What I am trying to say is that the kids may help the brothers in washing the clothes. To illustrate, children share some pieces of clothes to wash and some shoes to clean. Consequently, everybody will have clean clothes to use according to their needs. To sum up, studying is very important in the children life. They need to acquire a lot of knowledge. However, they are supposed to share duties at home. This is because they need a clean house to live and clean clothes to use.
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children
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help
their parents at home. They
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think
that
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children
should
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just
study. Others believe
otherwise
.
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should
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help
their father and mother at home. I
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think
that
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children
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need
to study,
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but
it is not the unique responsibility. They have obligation of helping their parents with the tasks at home.

My
first
reason is that
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children
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need
to
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help
their mother. What I mean is that while she is cooking rice, beans and salads, the
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kids
may prepare the juice.
For example
, they can squeeze the oranges or lemons. They can prepare the table putting the dishes and glasses.
Thus
, the whole family
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needs
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just
to sit and to have lunch or dinner.

Moreover
,
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children
may
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help
the father.
In other words
, he
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cleans
the dinner room and stay room and the
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kids
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clean
their bedrooms.
For instance
, they
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clean
the flour, wall and organize the
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clothes
, shoes in the wardrobe.
Therefore
, everybody shares tasks and
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helps
each one with their duties at home.

Finally
,
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kids
should work with their
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old
brothers. What I am trying to say is that the
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kids
may
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help
the brothers in washing the
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clothes
. To illustrate,
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children
share
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some
pieces of
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clothes
to wash and
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some
shoes to
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clean
.
Consequently
, everybody will have
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clean
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clothes
to
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use
according to their needs.

To sum up, studying is
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very
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important
in the
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children
life. They
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need
to acquire
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a lot of
knowledge.
However
, they
are supposed
to share duties at home. This is
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because
they
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need
a
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clean
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house
to
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live
and
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clean
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clothes
to
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use
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16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you age or disagree with the following statement? Children should not hace to work or help with household tasks; their only responsibility should be to study. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
272 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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