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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is easier to become an educated person today than it was in the past. Use reasons and examples to support your position. v.133

It is easier to become an educated person today than it was in the past. Use reasons and examples to support your position. v. 133
There is no doubt these days foods and money are essential elements in our lives. However, in these day habits of throwing foods are too much popular. Is considered one of the most controversial issues today. In this essay I am going to examine the causes of this phenomenon and suggest solutions at the end. There are many reasons behind this action first, people tend to throw the rest of their food because they have lots of money. A particular good example of this is the people who live in low economic status, they do not have this manner of eating, they are thinking about every piece of money they spent it to buy this food. Second reason linked to the first one is the living habit of the rich people, most of the rich people they do not take the rest of the food, they are thinking about how other people looked to them. A good illustration of that is high style people they do not want to reflect to the other that they do not have enough money by taking the residual of the food. Third reason might the dieting style, they are training themselves to not eat all the food in front of others. Famous people, for example, they never finish their dishes when they are in public events and this taught a bad practice to our children who watched them. In conclusion, the best way to decrease the number of this habit by education and awareness in school, university and public places. Moreover, train our children at home to finish their dishes and reward them if they did. Form my opinion, this is the most effective way to prevent this bad practice to be increased in the future.
There is no doubt these days
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foods
and
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money
are essential elements in our
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lives
.
However
, in these day habits of throwing
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foods
are too much popular.
Is considered
one of the most controversial issues
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today
. In this essay I am going to examine the causes of this phenomenon and suggest solutions at the
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end
.

There are
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many
reasons behind this action
first
,
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people
tend to throw the rest of their
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food
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because
they have lots of
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money
. A particular
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good
example of this is the
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people
who
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live
in low economic status, they do not have this manner of eating, they are thinking about every piece of
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money
they spent it to
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buy
this food.

Second reason linked to the
first
one is the living habit of the rich
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people
, most of the rich
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people
they do not take the rest of the
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food
, they are thinking about how other
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people
looked to them. A
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good
illustration of
that is
high style
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people
they do not want to reflect to the other that they do not have
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enough
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money
by taking the residual of the food.

Third reason might the dieting style, they are training themselves to not eat all the
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food
in front of others.
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Famous
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people
,
for example
, they never finish their dishes when they are in public
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events
and this taught a
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bad
practice to our children who
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watched
them.

In conclusion
, the best way to decrease the number of this habit by education and awareness in school, university and public places.
Moreover
, train our children at home to finish their dishes and reward them if they did. Form my opinion, this is the most effective way to
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prevent
this
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bad
practice to
be increased
in the future.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay It is easier to become an educated person today than it was in the past. Use reasons and examples to support your position. v. 133

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
292 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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