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TPO-16: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.3

TPO-16: The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 3
With the development of the economy and the convenience of the transportation system, travelling becomes a popular leisure event nowadays. However, there has been hot debate on which is the best the way to travel, travel in a tour group or travel independently? As far as I am concerned, the best way to travel is to travel independently. First of all, it is more flexible to travel independently than travel in a tour group. Most tour groups are designed with a fixed schedule, which will not adapt to any individual' s interest. For example, if we fall in love with a beautiful scene during a trip and want to extend the stay at the place, the tour guide will never allow that happen because everything is scheduled and the changes will affect other members in the group. While travelling as an independent traveler, we could change the schedule according to our mood and interest during the trip and no one will stop us from doing so. Indeed, I consider that as a kind of freedom. Moreover, it is hard for us to experience the real local culture and taste the authentic food with the tour groups since they will only take us to the commercial visitor sites and the restaurants that are only open for visitors. However, by travelling independently, we get to talk to the local people to explore the real exotic scenes and authentic food. We could even hang out with the friendly local people to do some special activities with them. Those are the experience that we would never get from a tour group. Last but not least, travelling independently can make us become more independent. With a tour guide in a group, we don' t get to worry about anything because we have somebody in our back. While travelling by ourselves, we need to make sure that we plan the trips reasonably and take care of ourselves when there is an emergency. Actually, I think this is a good opportunity for us to improve our independence. In summary, I think the best way to travel is travelling independently because that offers us more flexibility, more chance to experience local culture and an opportunity to be independent.
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travelling
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event
nowadays.
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travel
,
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travel
in a
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tour
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group
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travel
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independently
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travel
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independently
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travel
in a
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tour
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group
. Most
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tour
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groups
are designed
with a
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fixed
schedule, which will not adapt to any
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beautiful
scene during a trip and want to extend the stay at the place, the
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guide will never
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allow
that happen
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everything
is scheduled
and the
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changes
will affect other members in the
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group
. While
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travelling
as an independent traveler, we could
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change
the schedule according to our mood and interest during the trip and no one will
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stop
us from doing
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so
.
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, I consider that as a kind of freedom.

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, it is
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hard
for us to experience the real
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local
culture and taste the authentic food with the
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tour
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groups
since they will
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only
take us to the commercial visitor sites and the restaurants that are
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only
open for visitors.
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, by
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travelling
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independently
, we
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get
to talk to the
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local
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people
to explore the real exotic scenes and authentic food. We could even hang out with the friendly
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local
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people
to do
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some
special activities with them. Those are the experience that we would never
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tour
group.

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to worry about anything
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we have somebody in our back. While
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travelling
by ourselves, we need to
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make
sure that we plan the trips
reasonably
and take care of ourselves when there is an emergency. Actually, I
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think
this is a
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good
opportunity for us to
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improve
our independence.

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think
the best way to
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travel
is
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travelling
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independently
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because
that offers us more flexibility, more chance to experience
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local
culture and an opportunity to be independent.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO-16: The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
370 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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