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What is your favorite way of getting around? Describe it and explain why itis your favorite means of transportation. v.2

What is your favorite way of getting around? Describe it and explain why itis your favorite means of transportation. v. 2
Eating meals together with family is considered to be one of the important traditions in many cultures, where family members gather and enjoy conversation while eating homemade food. Nonetheless, it is said that this tradition is fading due to lifestyle changes, and the impacts of this phenomenon are possibly detrimental to individuals. This essay will discuss the causes and consequences of the loss of traditional family mealtime. One of the reasons why people do not eat meals together with family relates to modern busy lifestyles. Not only do many parents work long hours, but also children participate in after-school activities almost every day, which makes it difficult for each family member to get together at the same time for meals. Rather, it is easier to have meals at their own time. For example, a schoolchild who goes to a cram school may finish lessons after 10pm and come back home afterwards. It is too late for her family to wait till she comes back and have dinner together as her parents probably have to start early in the following morning to work. Thus, individuals have been leading busy lifestyles recently, and there is not enough time to enjoy meals together. The Impacts of this changing tradition are considerably negative to individuals for two reasons. Firstly, the family relationship may be hindered as family members have less time to communicate and share their stories with others. If a family can have meals together, it also serves the time to share the same experience and have a conversation, which will deepen the family bond. Secondly, eating alone is simply boring and people tend to eat unhealthy food when not sharing food with others. This is because it is much easier and cheaper for people to consume takeaway food that is high in sugar, sodium, and saturated fat when eating alone. This habit would negatively affect one’s health in a long term perspective. In conclusion, the changes in individuals' lifestyles contribute to the loss of traditional family meals in recent years, and the impacts of this phenomenon are detrimental as it hinders family relationships and one's health.
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members gather and enjoy conversation while
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homemade
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food
. Nonetheless, it
is said
that this tradition is fading due to
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lifestyle
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, and the impacts of this phenomenon are
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detrimental to individuals. This essay will discuss the causes and consequences of the loss of traditional
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family
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do not eat
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relates to modern busy
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lifestyles
. Not
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do
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parents work long hours,
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school may finish lessons after 10pm and
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back home afterwards. It is too late for her
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to wait till she
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back and have dinner together as her parents
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early in the following morning to work.
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, individuals have been leading busy
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lifestyles
recently, and there is not
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enough
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time
to enjoy
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The Impacts of this changing tradition are
considerably
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negative
to individuals for two reasons.
Firstly
, the
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relationship may
be hindered
as
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members have less
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time
to communicate and share their stories with others. If a
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can have
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together, it
also
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time
to share the same experience and have a conversation, which will deepen the
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bond.
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,
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alone is
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boring and
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tend to eat unhealthy
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when not sharing
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with others. This is
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because
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people
to consume takeaway
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food
that is
high in sugar, sodium, and saturated
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fat
when
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alone. This habit would
negatively
affect one’s health in a long term perspective.

In conclusion
, the
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changes
in individuals'
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lifestyles
contribute to the loss of traditional
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family
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meals
in recent years, and the impacts of this phenomenon are detrimental as it hinders
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family
relationships and one's health.
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IELTS essay What is your favorite way of getting around? Describe it and explain why itis your favorite means of transportation. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
354 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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