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Do you agree or disagree with: It is better for students at university or in college to choose difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades. v.1

with: It is better for students at university or in college to choose difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades. v. 1
University education is the kind of the experience that could have a formative impact on students. It has been argued that college students should opt for some difficult courses despite the poor grades they could get. I think it is not such a good idea. To begin with, grades could have a huge impact on students’ future career and top grades definitely would be a plus, so there is no sense in choosing a difficult subject. Needless to say, having a poor grade in one’s resume could be a real blow for anyone. It is especially true for college graduates when they are hunting for jobs, because they will lose competitiveness in labor markets. Let’s us get down to the fundamental that a transcript with good grades is a prerequisite for most companies when they need a talented employee. A recent online survey has shown that more than 80 precent of managers or HR would like to give priority to those job hunters who have a relatively competitive edge on grades they received during four years study in university. Therefore, we cannot deny the fact that grades do play a vital role in the process of job application for college graduates. If students lose such a competitive edge, they would have no hope of having what it takes to succeed in their future career. Moreover, difficult classes will lead students to lose faith in their capacity of learning. More often than not, such courses will bring students a big challenge that they can not handle even after they have already tried their best. In that case, students will probably feel depressed about their learning ability, thinking that they are not smart enough to continue this kind of study, When they do so, they will be stuck in such endless negative which has a adverse influence in their mentality development. For a young kid majoring in law, he chooses the advanced mathematic as a subject. But no matter what he does, the grades turn out his effort does not pay off, will he still have confidence to cope with it again? And think about he almost spends hours tackling those tricky mathematical problems, facing numerous formulas and some opaque terms. As a result, he will soon end up with stressed out yet still having no clue about it, which undoubtedly has a negative impact on his own self-esteem. Sure, some may argue that top grades represent nothing but just some numbers in the transcript. They may take Bill Gates as a model example. However, if you look at this issue more closely, how many of us would have the chance to become the person like Gates without a good grade in our resumes. One person cannot present the majority. In reality, most of us need good grades to pursue our future dream. To sum up, students should not consider to choose these difficult courses, for the benefits of their own self-esteem and the beautiful future career they can have.
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students
. It has
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that college
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students
should opt for
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difficult
courses despite the poor
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grades
they could
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get
. I
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good
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.

To
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with,
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grades
could have a huge impact on
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students’
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future
career and top
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grades
definitely would be a plus,
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so
there is no sense in choosing a
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difficult
subject. Needless to say, having a poor
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grade
in one’s resume could be a real blow for anyone. It is
especially
true for college graduates when they are hunting for jobs,
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because
they will lose competitiveness in labor markets.
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us
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get
down to the fundamental that a transcript with
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good
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grades
is a prerequisite for most
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companies
when they need a talented employee. A recent online survey has shown that more than 80
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precent
of managers or HR would like to give priority to those job hunters who have a
relatively
competitive edge on
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grades
they received during four years study in university.
Therefore
, we cannot deny the fact that
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grades
do play a vital role in the process of job application for college graduates. If
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students
lose such a competitive edge, they would have no hope of having what it takes to succeed in their
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future
career.

Moreover
,
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difficult
classes will lead
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students
to lose faith in their capacity of learning. More
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often
than not, such courses will bring
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students
a
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big
challenge that they can not handle even after they have already tried their best.
In that case
,
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students
will
probably
feel depressed about their learning ability, thinking that they are not smart
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enough
to continue this kind of study, When they do
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so
, they will
be stuck
in such endless
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negative
which has
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a
adverse influence in their mentality development. For a young kid majoring in law, he chooses the advanced mathematic as a subject.
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But
no matter what he does, the
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grades
turn out his effort does not pay off, will he
still
have confidence to cope with it again? And
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think
about he almost spends hours tackling those tricky mathematical problems, facing numerous formulas and
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some
opaque terms.
As a result
, he will
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soon
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end
up with
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stressed
out
yet
still
having no clue about it, which
undoubtedly
has a
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negative
impact on his
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own
self-esteem.

Sure,
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some
may argue that top
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grades
represent nothing
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but
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just
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numbers in the transcript. They may take Bill Gates as a model example.
However
, if you look at this issue more
closely
, how
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many
of us would have the chance to become the person like Gates without a
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good
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grade
in our resumes. One person cannot present the majority. In reality, most of us need
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good
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grades
to pursue our
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future
dream.

To sum up,
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students
should not
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consider to choose
these
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difficult
courses, for the benefits of their
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own
self-esteem and the
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beautiful
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future
career they can have.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay with: It is better for students at university or in college to choose difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
498 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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