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Do you agree or disagree with following statement it is better to hold a big party and invite many people to come than a small party where only a few close friends and family members are invited. v.2

it is better to hold a big party and invite many people to come than a small party where only a few close friends and family members are invited. v. 2
Even though people are so busy, gathering together and enjoying our time with each other should never be forgotten. Some people hold parties and invite their friends in specific days such as birthdays. They have a plan for managing their party very well and they know which of their relatives or friends would be invited. The controversial question which is often raised regarding this idea is whether it is better to hold a big and crowded party or a small one with close families and friends. From my own vantage perspective, I am strongly disagreed with this idea that the big party would be better than small one and I will explicate my chief reasons through the following paragraphs. To commence, the first subtle point requires to be mentioned is not cost effective. Holding a big party would provide tremendous expenses. Therefore, the party would not be so economical for its host. In order to shed more light on the proposed fact some of families have tight budget and they cannot afford to hold a big party. If these families want to have a big party with inviting many people, they would spend all of their budgets and incomes. It would be harsh for them. However, they either can hold a small party with cordial friends and relatives or save their money and they do not concern about their low budgets. Thus, I subscribe to hold a small party. Another compelling reason comes in to consideration is managing well. If people hold a big party, they would meet some problems for organizing the party. From my experience, I and my sister decided to hold a big party and invited about 200 guests. We organized everything which must be performed in our party for example buying all of staffs, decorating our houses, choosing the music and so on. But when the party started, everything was ruined and we felt upset, our party was destroyed since we had been confused how to handle the large number of our guests. Whereas, in the small party people can manage their party well and feel relax because they can control everything so easily. I concur small parties would be more practical and memorable than big ones. To wrap it up, all aforementioned arguments lead us to the fact that planning to have a small party with close friends and families would be more beneficial than the big one. The owners of small party feel relax and its costs do not oppress them, so both hosts and guests can enjoy the party. I firmly recommend that people decide to hold a big party or small one by considering their budget and their abilities to manage the party.
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busy, gathering together and enjoying our time with each other should never
be forgotten
.
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Some
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people
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hold
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parties
and invite their
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friends
in specific days such as birthdays. They have a plan for managing their
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party
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very
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well and
they know which of their relatives or
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friends
would
be invited
. The controversial question which is
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often
raised regarding this
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idea
is whether it is better to
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hold
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big
and crowded
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party
or a
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small
one with close
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families
and
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friends
. From my
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own
vantage perspective, I am
strongly
disagreed with this
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idea
that the
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big
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party
would be better than
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small
one and I will explicate my chief reasons through the following paragraphs.

To commence, the
first
subtle point requires to
be mentioned
is not cost effective. Holding a
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big
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party
would provide tremendous expenses.
Therefore
, the
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party
would not be
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so
economical for its host. In order to shed more light on the proposed fact
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some
of
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families
have tight
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budget and
they cannot afford to
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hold
a
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big
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party
. If these
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families
want to have a
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big
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party
with inviting
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many
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people
, they would spend all of their
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budgets
and incomes. It would be harsh for them.
However
, they either can
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hold
a
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small
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party
with cordial
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friends
and relatives or save their
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money and
they do not concern about their low
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budgets
.
Thus
, I subscribe to
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hold
a
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small
party.

Another compelling reason
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comes
in to consideration is managing well. If
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people
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hold
a
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big
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party
, they would
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meet
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some
problems for organizing the
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party
. From my experience, I and my sister decided to
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hold
a
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big
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party
and invited about 200 guests. We organized everything which
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must
be performed
in our
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party
for example
buying
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all of staffs
, decorating our
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houses
, choosing the music and
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so
on.
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But
when the
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party
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started
, everything was
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ruined and
we felt upset, our
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party
was
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destroyed
since we had
been confused
how to handle the large number of our guests. Whereas, in the
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small
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party
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people
can manage their
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party
well and feel relax
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because
they can control everything
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so
easily
. I concur
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small
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parties
would be more practical and memorable than
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big
ones.

To wrap it up, all aforementioned arguments lead us to the fact that planning to have a
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small
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party
with close
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friends
and
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families
would be more beneficial than the
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big
one. The owners of
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small
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party
feel relax and its costs do not oppress them,
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so
both hosts and guests can enjoy the
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party
. I
firmly
recommend that
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people
decide to
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hold
a
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big
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party
or
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small
one by considering their
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budget
and their abilities to manage the
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party
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
69Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay it is better to hold a big party and invite many people to come than a small party where only a few close friends and family members are invited. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
451 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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