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Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort To what extent do you agree with this How do you think space exploration will change in the future v.2

Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort 2
In ancient century, fire-lighting has been found by the early man. It is kind of big invention which brings the huge impact throughout the world. But now, people who explore the space is a common in our life, it has been argued that people going outer space have had more to do with national pride than international effort. In my mind, people who explore the space have been made their nationality proud of them because they brought their country flag which fluttered in space. Now, let’s discuss this essay. Since people know about technology, they try to develop their knowledge about all of science without exception they are looking for something new in outer space. Neil Elden Armstrong was an American astronaut and the first person to walk on the Moon. In July 21th 1969, they landed on the Moon then he put the American flag in the surface of the Moon. From that moment, America has been well-known as the Superpower Country which has advance technology to send the man explore outside Earth. People who journey into outer space make their country really proud of them because they show to throughout the world how great their country. Then, it could be national prestige which is no other countries have it. On the other hand, some may argue that space exploration has had international effort because the current practicality confirms that collaborative efforts are available and the efforts will contribute to the fulfillment of the purpose of the space exploration. Even if the United States alone is fully capable of going to Mars, it has no reason to make that ventures an isolated effort. The United States must be open enough to work with other nations not only for even higher efficiency but also for a share of excitement and benefits with everyone on the earth. In the future, I think voyage to outside the Earth is becoming a necessity for human because many people use advance technology which can be developed on other planets. Travel to outside Earth will be common for ordinary people who do not have basic as a cosmonaut. Next generation, the situation in our Earth will be changing and there is new information about move the half of people on Earth to live on Mars. Thus, the scientists have prepared and enhance the knowledge how to survive in outer space. To sum up, Astronaut who succeeded travel outer space will brings the prestigious impression about their country. Although, the nations of the world must move toward global unification and the cooperation in space will be an ideal approach since there exists no national border. Then, high technology will make easier people on Earth to have journey outer space and it will get well-known in the future.
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been found
by the early
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man
. It is kind of
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big
invention which brings the huge impact throughout the world.
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But
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now
,
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people
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who
explore the
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space
is a common in our life, it has
been argued
that
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people
going
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outer
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space
have had more to do with national pride than international
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effort
. In my mind,
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people
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who
explore the
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space
have
been made
their nationality proud of them
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because
they brought their
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country
flag which fluttered in
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space
.
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Now
,
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let
’s discuss this essay.

Since
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people
know about
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technology
, they try to develop their knowledge about
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all of science
without exception they are looking for something new in
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outer
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space
. Neil
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Elden
Armstrong was an American astronaut and the
first
person to walk on the Moon. In July
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21th
1969, they landed on the Moon then he put the American flag in the surface of the Moon. From that moment, America has been well-known as the Superpower
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Country
which has advance
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technology
to
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send
the
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man
explore outside
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Earth
.
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People
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who
journey into
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outer
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space
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make
their
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country
really
proud of them
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because
they
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show
to throughout the world how great their
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country
. Then, it could be national prestige which is no
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other
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countries
have it.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
may argue that
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space
exploration has had international
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effort
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because
the
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current
practicality confirms that collaborative
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efforts
are available and the
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efforts
will contribute to the fulfillment of the purpose of the
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space
exploration. Even if the United States alone is
fully
capable of going to Mars, it has no reason to
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make
that ventures an isolated
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effort
. The United States
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must
be open
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enough
to work with
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other
nations not
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only
for even higher efficiency
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but
also
for a share of excitement and benefits with everyone on the earth.

In the future, I
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think
voyage to outside the
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Earth
is becoming a necessity for human
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because
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many
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people
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use
advance
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technology
which can
be developed
on
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other
planets. Travel to outside
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Earth
will be common for ordinary
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people
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who
do not have basic as a cosmonaut.
Next
generation, the situation in our
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Earth
will be changing and there is new information about
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move
the half of
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people
on
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Earth
to
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live
on Mars.
Thus
, the scientists have prepared and enhance the knowledge how to survive in
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outer
space.

To sum up, Astronaut
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who
succeeded travel
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outer
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space
will
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brings
the prestigious impression about their
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country
. Although, the nations of the world
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must
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move
toward global unification and the cooperation in
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space
will be an ideal approach since there exists no national border. Then, high
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technology
will
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make
easier
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people
on
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Earth
to have
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journey
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outer
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space
and it will
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get
well-known in the future.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
461 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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