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Do you agree or disagree the following statement? Only movies that can teach us something real life is worth watching. v.1

Only movies that can teach us something real life is worth watching. v. 1
It is a fact that, the internet has effected our life's one way or another; sometimes positive and on some occasions negatively. The Internet had made our life much easier by giving access to information with a click of a button. Some people believe, although there are many advantages to using the internet; it comes with many associated problems like identity theft, information theft etc. I believe the benefits a person derives from using the internet outweighs its disadvantages and in this essay I will put forth my views with suitable examples. Firstly, developing the internet or the World Wide Web was one of the greatest achievements of mankind from the last century. With the help of the Internet many companies which started off in garages became multi-billion dollar companies. But as the reach of the internet became wider, it was very clear that there were many problems associated with web usage. But many of the security issues related to internet usage can be prevented by taking some simple precautionary measures. For instance, it is better to browse the internet or use banking portals using a VPN (Virtual Private Network), by doing so you will be able to hide your identity from potential hackers who are trying to get your personal information such as credit card details. Secondly, with the help of internet students are getting access to information on a wide variety of topics through e-learning portals like Coursera and Udemay. This has helped many students across the world who do not get the opportunity to go to college to learn these subjects. For example, it's been estimated that by 2025 there will be almost 10 million students across the world using e-learning portals for their educational needs. To conclude, although there are some disadvantages to using the internet, I believe the benefits you derive out of using the internet outweighs the negatives
It is a fact that, the internet has effected our life's one way or another;
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positive
and on
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some
occasions
negatively
. The Internet had made our life much easier by giving access to
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information
with a click of a button.
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Some
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people
believe, although there are
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many
advantages to using the internet; it
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comes
with
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many
associated problems like identity theft,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
theft etc. I believe the benefits a person derives from using the internet outweighs its disadvantages and in this essay I will put forth my views with suitable examples.

Firstly
, developing the internet or the World Wide Web was one of the greatest achievements of mankind from the last century. With the
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help
of the Internet
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many
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companies
which
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started
off in garages became multi-billion dollar
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companies
.
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But
as the reach of the internet became wider, it was
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very
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clear
that there were
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many
problems associated with web usage.
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But
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many
of the security issues related to internet usage can be
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prevented
by taking
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some
simple precautionary measures.
For instance
, it is better to browse the internet or
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use
banking portals using a VPN (Virtual Private Network), by doing
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so
you will be able to
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hide
your identity from potential hackers who are trying to
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get
your personal
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information
such as credit card
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details
.

Secondly
, with the
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help
of internet students are getting access to
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information
on a wide variety of topics through e-learning portals like Coursera and
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Udemay
. This has
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helped
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many
students across the world who do not
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get
the opportunity to go to college to learn these subjects.
For example
, it's
been estimated
that by 2025 there will be almost 10 million students across the world using e-learning portals for their educational needs.

To conclude
, although there are
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some
disadvantages to using the internet, I believe the benefits you derive out of using the internet outweighs the negatives
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IELTS essay Only movies that can teach us something real life is worth watching. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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