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Do you agree or disagree? Competitions between friends always has a negative effect on their friends? v.81

Competitions between friends always has a negative effect on their friends? v. 81
Obviously, different people may have different views on using public places, whether it will be used as a park or as commercial purposes. Anyway, I agree that government property should be used either for business or keep unused. To one side, there are many advantages to keep the public field unused. Firstly, people often use it for recreation. For instance, some people try to find accompany from this spot as many visitors come to enjoy their leisure time. Therefore, people may find their beloved person as it can be used as communication places. In addition, people hardly manage few moments for physical activity, and the field could be the best choice for exercise because of spacious ground. Also, teenagers sometime desire to spend a few moments with their beloved-one in such a quiet place where keeping them away from known relatives. Thus, keeping public place should be unused for any other purposes. However, on the other, utilizing public property for commercial purposes have some benefits. To begin, government may earn revenue. For example, the local authority will establish a business organization so that the authority could rent it to produce money. Secondly, local inhabitants might benefit to receive job because of considering them as a local candidate. In addition, the administrator needs to construct a lodge at this area so that unemployed people could find accommodation without any charge. Therefore, utilizing public places for trade purpose is significant. To conclude, many people use public ground and find benefit, while others find advantageous from business point. I believe that keeping public property for both unused and commercial purposes is meaningful.
Obviously
,
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different
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people
may have
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different
views on using
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public
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places
, whether it will be
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used
as a park or as commercial
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purposes
. Anyway, I
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agree
that
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government
property should be
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used
either for business or
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keep
unused.

To one side, there are
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many
advantages to
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keep
the
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public
field unused.
Firstly
,
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people
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often
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use
it for recreation.
For instance
,
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some
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people
try to
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find
accompany from this spot as
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many
visitors
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come
to enjoy their leisure time.
Therefore
,
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people
may
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find
their beloved person as it can be
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used
as communication
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places
.
In addition
,
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people
hardly manage few moments for physical activity, and the field could be the best choice for exercise
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because
of spacious ground.
Also
,
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teenagers
sometime desire to spend a few moments with their beloved-one in such a quiet
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place
where keeping them away from known relatives.
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, keeping
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public
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place
should
be unused
for any other purposes.

However
, on the other, utilizing
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public
property for commercial
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purposes
have
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some
benefits. To
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begin
,
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government
may earn revenue.
For example
, the local authority will establish a business organization
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so
that the authority could rent it to produce money.
Secondly
, local inhabitants might benefit to receive job
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because
of considering them as a local candidate.
In addition
, the administrator needs to construct a lodge at this area
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so
that unemployed
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people
could
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find
accommodation without any charge.
Therefore
, utilizing
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public
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places
for trade
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purpose
is significant.

To conclude
,
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many
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people
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use
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public
ground and
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find
benefit, while others
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find
advantageous from business point. I believe that keeping
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public
property for both unused and commercial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
purposes
is meaningful.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Competitions between friends always has a negative effect on their friends? v. 81

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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