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Do you agree or disagree? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve internet access than to public transportation. v.78

It is more important for governments to spend money to improve internet access than to public transportation. v. 78
In the last few decades, schooling is no longer restricted to a specific place. Rather, people are beginning to teach their children from home. Whilst some are concerned that this is wrong, I strongly believe that it is a potential pathway. On the one hand, home schooling deprives the younger ones the ability to socialize. The argument to support this is that one of the places where a child can learn interpersonal skills is in the classroom. Since, he is being taught from home, this social ability remains dormant. The Punch newspaper, for example, reported that mothers who engage this new method are uncomfortable with the inability of their wards to relate with other members of the society. Thus, this could affect on them later in life. On the other hand, I do not believe that the aforementioned view stand up to scrutiny. Firstly, house tutoring gives parents the chance to spend more time with their children. That is, they have all the time to play and know the personality of each child better. In addition, schooling from home ensures that each pupil is taught at his own pace, giving room for emphasis and corrections. The Queen's university, for instance, revealed a study in 2017 that students who were home tutored performed better in mathematics than their counterparts who had their classes in the school. Thus, justifying this new trend. In conclusion, we have found a new ground for the next generation where they can be educated within the confines of their habitat and yet they have all the attention that they so desire.
In the last few decades, schooling is no longer restricted to a specific place.
Rather
,
people
are beginning to teach their children from home. Whilst
some
are concerned
that this is
wrong
, I
strongly
believe that it is a potential pathway.

On the one hand,
home schooling
deprives the younger ones the ability to socialize. The argument to support this is that one of the places where a child can learn interpersonal
skills
is in the classroom. Since, he is
being taught
from home, this social ability remains dormant. The Punch newspaper,
for example
, reported that mothers who engage this new method are uncomfortable with the inability of their wards to relate with other members of the society.
Thus
, this could
affect
on them later in life.

On the other hand
, I do not believe that the aforementioned view stand up to scrutiny.

Firstly
,
house
tutoring gives parents the chance to spend more time with their children.
That is
, they have all the time to play and know the personality of each child better.
In addition
, schooling from home ensures that each pupil
is taught
at his
own
pace, giving room for emphasis and corrections. The Queen's university,
for instance
, revealed a study in 2017 that students who were home tutored performed
better in mathematics
than their counterparts who had their classes in the school.
Thus
, justifying this new trend.

In conclusion
, we have found a new ground for the
next
generation where they can
be educated
within the confines of their
habitat and
yet
they have all the attention that they
so
desire.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is more important for governments to spend money to improve internet access than to public transportation. v. 78

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
264 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
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