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Do you agree or disagree? successful people try new things and take risk than only doing what they already know how to do well. v.50

successful people try new things and take risk than only doing what they already know how to do well. v. 50
There is no doubt these days the medical research is playing a major role in our lives. However, the question: Does using animal in researches has a great benefit in human health? Is considered one of the most controversial questions today. In this essay I am going to examine this situation from both viewpoints. On one side of the argument there are people who argue that the benefits considerably outweigh the disadvantages. The main reason for believing that there are many diseases attacked the humans during their life and they are also new diseases. Corona, for example, when it is discovered at the first time in the medical field, many people were dying because of it, until the researchers did their trails on the rats, where lead them to many types of treatment. However, the use of rats was helping the entire society, especially who exposed to the same problem. On the other hand, it is also possible to consider it from the opposing case. There are people who often argued that the use of the wildlife in medical experiments is obviously inhumanity. There are often believed that because most of the trails that has been done killed the animals and failed. However, they believed that as they were not sick and their loved one also. We have seen there are no easy answers to this question. On balance, however, I tend to believe that we must use the animals in medical studies in order to find better treatment of the disease. Therefore, that might kills the animal, but at the same time it might solve the problem. We must keep on doing the experiment to protect our future generation from those health problems
There is no doubt these days the
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medical
research is playing a major role in our
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lives
.
However
, the question: Does using
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animal
in researches has a great benefit in human health?
Is considered
one of the most controversial questions
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today
. In this essay I am going to examine this situation from both viewpoints.

On one side of the argument there are
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people
who argue that the benefits
considerably
outweigh the disadvantages. The main reason for believing that there are
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many
diseases attacked the humans during their
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life and
they are
also
new diseases. Corona,
for example
, when it
is discovered
at the
first
time in the
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medical
field,
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many
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people
were dying
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because
of it, until the researchers did their trails on the rats, where lead them to
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many
types of treatment.
However
, the
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use
of rats was helping the entire society,
especially
who exposed to the same problem.

On the other hand
, it is
also
possible to consider it from the opposing case. There are
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people
who
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often
argued that the
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use
of the wildlife in
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medical
experiments is
obviously
inhumanity. There are
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often
believed that
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because
most of the trails that has
been done
killed the
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animals
and failed.
However
, they believed that as they were not sick and their
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loved
one
also
.

We have
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seen
there are no easy answers to this question. On balance,
however
, I tend to believe that we
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must
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use
the
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animals
in
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medical
studies in order to find better treatment of the disease.
Therefore
, that might kills the
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animal
,
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but
at the same time it might solve the problem. We
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must
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keep
on doing the experiment to protect our future generation from those health
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problems
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay successful people try new things and take risk than only doing what they already know how to do well. v. 50

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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