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When you face a difficult problem in life what do you feel is the best way to solve it asking someone with more experience for advice about the problem finding information about the problem using the Internet taking a long time to think about the problem v.1

When you face a difficult problem in life what do you feel is the best way to solve it asking someone with more experience for advice about the problem finding information about the problem using the Internet taking a long time to think about the problem v. 1
In recent years, amazing breakthroughs in the sphere of Information Technology (IT) have enabled man to perform Herculean tasks, such as assembling cars etc. , fairly quickly. Whereas some commentators are of the opinion that computers would replace humans in the near future, others fervently believe that there is no replacement for human-intelligence. Although the former opinion can hardly be challenged, it is also impossible to ignore the latter standpoint. This essay will discuss how computer and humans go hand in hand in the days to come. On the one hand, robots, which are equipped with artificial intelligence, are accomplishing most of the tough tasks. For instance, lifting heavier objects while assembling cars was considered toilsome in the past, but now this can be done in the blink of an eye. This is because man made machines do not exhaust rather they can work at length. If, in contrast, if automated machines did not assemble vehicles, there would be a serious shortage of automobiles. One the other hand, there is no substitute of man's wisdom. Although man-made machine may be beneficial to a great extent, they still depend on man in order to execute the required tasks. For instance, an operator is required to operate robots in motorcar industry. Furthermore, IT machines cannot comprehend the complexity of the human brain, therefore, they may not be able to replace humans altogether. Teaching is one of the complex tasks which can only be accomplished by human beings. Consequently, humans are needed to tackle their species. To sum up, While automation has played a pivotal role in almost all industries including car manufacturing, humans are still needed to monitor these machines. Moreover, educators can only impart knowledge as they understand the function of human nervous system. Therefore, I wholeheartedly believe human interaction is still required in all walks of life.
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man
to perform Herculean
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tasks
, such as assembling cars etc.
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,
fairly
quickly
. Whereas
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some
commentators are of the opinion that computers would replace
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humans
in the near future, others
fervently
believe that there is no replacement for human-intelligence. Although the former opinion can hardly
be challenged
, it is
also
impossible to
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ignore
the latter standpoint. This essay will discuss how computer and
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humans
go
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hand
in
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hand
in the days to
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come
.

On the one
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hand
, robots, which
are equipped
with artificial intelligence, are accomplishing most of the tough
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tasks
.
For instance
, lifting heavier objects while assembling cars
was considered
toilsome in the past,
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but
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now
this can
be done
in the blink of an eye. This is
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because
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man
made
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machines
do not exhaust
rather
they can work at length. If,
in contrast
, if automated
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machines
did not assemble vehicles, there would be a serious shortage of automobiles.

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One
the other
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hand
, there is no substitute of
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man
's wisdom. Although
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man
-made
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machine
may be beneficial to a great extent, they
still
depend on
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man
in order to execute the required
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tasks
.
For instance
, an operator
is required
to operate robots in motorcar industry.
Furthermore
, IT
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machines
cannot comprehend the complexity of the
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human
brain,
therefore
, they may not be able to replace
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humans
altogether. Teaching is one of the complex
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tasks
which can
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only
be accomplished
by
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human
beings.
Consequently
,
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humans
are needed
to tackle their species.

To sum up, While automation has played a pivotal role in almost all industries including car manufacturing,
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humans
are
still
needed to monitor these
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machines
.
Moreover
, educators can
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only
impart knowledge as they understand the function of
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human
nervous system.
Therefore
, I
wholeheartedly
believe
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human
interaction is
still
required in all walks of life.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay When you face a difficult problem in life what do you feel is the best way to solve it asking someone with more experience for advice about the problem finding information about the problem using the Internet taking a long time to think about the problem v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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