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People can solve important problems in their daily life on their own or with the help from families. The help from the government is no necessary. Agree or disagree v.2

People can solve important problems in their daily life on their own or with the help from families. The help from the government is no necessary. Agree or disagree v. 2
As we are confronting with important problems of ourselves in daily life, I believe in most occasions we solve these problems on our own or by our family. Most of us are educated well and we should handle our own business without the help of the authority. Meanwhile, as we are considering the relationship between individuals and the governments if there are troubles we need to solve in the daily life, the authority in most occasions is the rule maker while not the God who could save us. I will address my view as follows. To begin with, there is an old saying in China that the most integrity official cannot handle family affairs well. It is true that when we solve important problems especially the family issues, both the insiders and outsiders could not perceive the case as a whole. Thus, the family would appreciate the attitude of the government which could help them with nothing. In China, there is a tradition that the adults should adopt their parents who are getting old. While due to the great pressure of the people brought by the rapid development of the society, some of them could not take care with enough time and energy, let alone the money. Then some government officials went to call these people back from the work to adopt their parents. It is ridiculous that if they get back, some of them would lose the job which means they would have no money to survive. Thus I would like to assume that the government would have better not take care of this business which is ruled by the traditional ethics of Chinese. In addition, there are many important problems which could not be solved by the government. Individual progress, for instance, one can not make progress with the help of the government if he does not make any efforts, even if the government offer the opportunity to people of studying for free. As personal progress is one of the most important problems today, it is still the business of ones' own, I saw lots of teenagers dropped out of school which was free for them as a policy of the government, while they still learned nothing except for stealing or robbing in the street which they believe these are more efficient way to be rich. There are lots of news like this on TV in China as the helping the poverty is far enough for the poor people in China, some of them need help in mind instead of the money. Finally, I believe the government as the role make could benefit all the people for public issues while not personal problems. While that does not mean the government could not help people with their own problems which are important to them. If every law and regulation was run well in the country, I believe there will be fewer problems everyone would have to deal with. In all, as educated people, we should handle the business of our own instead of asking the government for help, which I believe is a more mature way to all of us. This is an important attitude we should have.
As we are confronting with
important
problems
of ourselves in daily life, I
believe
in most occasions we solve these
problems
on our
own
or by our
family
. Most of us
are educated
well and
we should handle our
own
business
without the
help
of the authority. Meanwhile, as we are considering the relationship between individuals and the
governments
if there are troubles we need to solve in the daily life, the authority in most occasions is the
rule
maker while not the God who could save us. I will address my view as follows.

To
begin
with, there is an
old
saying in China that the most integrity official cannot handle
family
affairs well. It is true that when we solve
important
problems
especially
the
family
issues, both the insiders and outsiders could not perceive the case as a whole.
Thus
, the
family
would appreciate the attitude of the
government
which could
help
them with nothing. In China, there is a tradition that the adults should adopt their parents who are getting
old
. While due to the great pressure of the
people
brought by the rapid development of the society,
some
of them could not take care with
enough
time and energy,
let
alone the money. Then
some
government
officials went to call these
people
back from the work to adopt their parents. It is ridiculous that if they
get
back,
some
of them would lose the job which means they would have no money to survive.
Thus
I would like to assume that the
government
would have better not take care of this
business
which
is ruled
by the traditional ethics of Chinese.

In addition
, there are
many
important
problems
which could not
be solved
by the
government
. Individual progress,
for instance
, one can not
make
progress with the
help
of the
government
if he does not
make
any efforts, even if the
government
offer the opportunity to
people
of studying for free. As personal progress is one of the most
important
problems
today
, it is
still
the
business
of
ones&
#039;
own
, I
saw
lots of
teenagers
dropped out of school which was free for them as a policy of the
government
, while they
still
learned nothing
except for
stealing or robbing in the street which they
believe
these are more efficient way to be rich. There are lots of news like this on TV in China as the helping the poverty is far
enough
for the poor
people
in China,
some
of them need
help
in mind
instead
of the money.

Finally
, I
believe
the
government
as the role
make
could benefit all the
people
for public issues while not personal
problems
.
While
that does not mean the
government
could not
help
people
with their
own
problems
which are
important
to them. If every law and regulation
was run
well in the country, I
believe
there will be fewer
problems
everyone would
have to
deal with.

In all, as educated
people
, we should handle the
business
of our
own
instead
of asking the
government
for
help
, which I
believe
is a more mature way to all of us. This is an
important
attitude we should have.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay People can solve important problems in their daily life on their own or with the help from families. The help from the government is no necessary. Agree or disagree v. 2

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