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do you agree or disagree? the internet provides people with valuable information, other think access to so much information creates problems? v.16

the internet provides people with valuable information, other think access to so much information creates problems? v. 16
In the modern era, people need to migrate overseas for many reasons and thus, language barrier plays a vital role in their lives. It is often said that being not able to speak a foreign dialect properly can cause serious consequences in their lives. I would agree with the above line and this essay will give explanations. Undoubtedly, in a foreign land, indigenous language is the easiest mode of communication with native speakers, failing that can cause a number of problems. To start with, it would be difficult to communicate with local people in day-to-day life. For instance, it is likely to be very hard to choose a dish to savour in a foreign restaurant. As a consequence, quality of life appears not to be that great while you are not able to interact in local means of communication. Another point to mention is, people coming to a foreign country and poor in speaking non-native language, usually stay in small enclave together, making their community. As a result, they cannot make new friends and face discrimination. That can lead to unemployment, violence, or even terrorism among youth. In regards to professional life, one may face difficulties in interacting with their immediate higher authority in a new country. This could hinder their career progress, especially when job-+market is competitive. Additionally, while working in a team, being not able to communicate properly within the team, might destroy the team spirit and the foreign tend to feel isolated. So, overall it appears that people who cannot overcome the difference in language, are bound to face some difficulties in their life in a foreign land. Admittedly, living in a new country will open an ocean of opportunity to anyone and technological advancement has made it easier to overcome the language barrier, nevertheless, one has to struggle with language problem in their initial days in a new place. In conclusion, although modern era has given us a number of ways to pass the obstacle of foreign language, it still tends to cause fewer social and practical issues when people change their habitat.
In the modern era,
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people
need to migrate overseas for
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many
reasons and
thus
,
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language
barrier plays a vital role in their
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lives
. It is
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often
said that being not able to speak a
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foreign
dialect
properly
can cause serious consequences in their
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lives
. I would
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agree
with the above line and this essay will give explanations.

Undoubtedly
, in a
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foreign
land, indigenous
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language
is the easiest mode of communication with native speakers, failing that can cause a number of problems. To
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start
with, it would be difficult to communicate with local
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people
in day-to-day
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life
.
For instance
, it is likely to be
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very
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hard
to choose a dish to
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savour
in a
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foreign
restaurant. As a consequence, quality of
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life
appears not to be that great while you are not able to interact in local means of communication. Another point to mention is,
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people
coming to a
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foreign
country and poor in speaking non-native
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language
,
usually
stay in
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small
enclave together, making their community.
As a result
, they cannot
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make
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new
friends and face discrimination. That can lead to unemployment, violence, or even terrorism among youth.

Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
In regards to
professional
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life
, one may face difficulties in interacting with their immediate higher authority in a
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new
country. This could hinder their career progress,
especially
when job
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market is competitive.
Additionally
, while working in a team, being not able to communicate
properly
within the team, might
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destroy
the team spirit and the
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foreign
tend to feel isolated.
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So
,
overall
it appears that
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people
who cannot overcome the difference in
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language
,
are bound
to face
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some
difficulties in their
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life
in a
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foreign
land.

Admittedly
, living in a
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new
country will open an ocean of opportunity to anyone and technological advancement has made it easier to overcome the
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language
barrier,
nevertheless
, one
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has to
struggle with
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language
problem in their initial days in a
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new
place.

In conclusion
, although modern era has
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given
us a number of ways to pass the obstacle of
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foreign
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language
, it
still
tends to cause fewer social and practical issues when
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people
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change
their habitat.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay the internet provides people with valuable information, other think access to so much information creates problems? v. 16

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
347 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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