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do you agree or disagree? one can learn about a person from the types of friends this person has. v.136

one can learn about a person from the types of friends this person has. v. 136
The question is whether people would know a person based on his friends' characters or not. Everyone in consideration to his private perspective may maintain a specific direction toward this statement. Some believe the friends do not have any impacts on our personality while others claim humans' behavior or performance can affect each other during the friendships. Personally, I assume that mentioned questioned depends on some conditions and one may fail if he relies on one factor; hence, the next paragraphs will vastly elucidate my vantage point through salient reason: To begin with, nobody could overlook the friends' role in life. Since nowadays the world has changed and people are involved in economic crises, social pressures and family problems and so on; therefore, the existence of a friend is required as a vital factor in the living beings' life. People need to talk, consult and spend pleasant times with each other to forget their troubles. When a friend relationship is made, both of sides want to experience the common interests otherwise the aforementioned association can be a waste of time. For instance, two men who have got familiar in the pool share a big passion toward swimming or at least they enjoy swimming. In another circumstance, the friends are inclined to imitate each other’s' behavior - this phenomenon is called social reaction in the psychology-. Should a person spend much time with his peers, so he is able to behave like them; hence, one can gain a total knowledge about this person with observing his friends' character and interest. The second reason for my argument lies in the fact that sometimes the friendships form for other purposes such as achieving business goals or doing a project. In such diverse positions, people do not look for the same interest, but the point is important is that they tend to collaborate with each other to gain the success. Take my own experience in this field. Two years ago, I had to complete an archeology project with a clever girl who smokes a lot. Even though I hate cigarette; however, I needed that girl for finishing the mentioned project. One day, my professor invited me to his office and then he started talking about disadvantages of smoking. It goes without saying that he thought I was a smoky person due to having friendship with that girl. Finally, the professor apologized for his inappropriate judgment. To sum up, this conclusion could be drawn that a judgment about humans' characters requires more researches about their friendships and the goals which friends look for them.
The question is whether
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would know a
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based on his
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friends&
#039; characters or not. Everyone in consideration to his private perspective may maintain a specific direction toward this statement.
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Some
believe the
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friends
do not have any impacts on our personality while others claim
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humans&
#039; behavior or performance can affect each
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other
during the
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friendships
.
Personally
, I assume that mentioned questioned depends on
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some
conditions and one may fail if he relies on one factor;
hence
, the
next
paragraphs will
vastly
elucidate my vantage point through salient reason:

To
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begin
with, nobody could overlook the
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friends&
#039; role in life. Since nowadays the world has
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changed
and
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people
are involved
in economic crises, social pressures and family problems and
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so
on;
therefore
, the existence of a
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friend
is required
as a vital factor in the living
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beings&
#039; life.
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People
need to talk, consult and spend pleasant times with each
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other
to forget their troubles. When a
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friend
relationship
is made
, both of sides want to experience the common interests
otherwise
the aforementioned association can be a waste of time.
For instance
, two
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men
who have
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got
familiar in the pool share a
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big
passion toward swimming or at least they enjoy swimming. In another circumstance, the
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friends
are inclined
to imitate each other’
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s&
#039; behavior
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-
this phenomenon
is called
social reaction in the psychology-. Should a
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person
spend much time with his peers,
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so
he is able to behave like them;
hence
, one can gain a total knowledge about this
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person
with observing his
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friends&
#039; character and interest.

The second reason for my argument lies in the fact that
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sometimes
the
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friendships
form for
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other
purposes such as achieving business goals or doing a project. In such diverse positions,
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people
do not look for the same interest,
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but
the point is
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important
is that they tend to collaborate with each
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other
to gain the success. Take my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
experience in this field. Two years ago, I had to complete an archeology project with a clever girl who smokes a lot.
Even though
I hate cigarette;
however
, I needed that girl for finishing the mentioned project. One day, my professor invited me to his
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office and
then he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
talking about disadvantages of smoking. It goes without saying that he
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thought
I was a smoky
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person
due to having
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friendship
with that girl.
Finally
, the professor apologized for his inappropriate judgment.

To sum up, this conclusion could
be drawn
that a judgment about
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humans&
#039; characters requires more researches about their
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friendships
and the goals which
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friends
look for them.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay one can learn about a person from the types of friends this person has. v. 136

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
429 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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