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In some country’s children have very strict rules of behaviour, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples v.2

In some country’s children have very strict rules of behaviour, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. 2
The regulations which a small schooler should follow has long been debated. In some parts of the Asian continent parents have a command on their children while in the western countries where the rules are liberal for the children and give more freedom at a younger age. A child is considered as the future generation. They should learn moral skills at an early age so that they are more conscious at a later part of life. If they are obedient to their elders, then they continue respecting their elders when they reach adulthood. The recent survey in Asian countries revealed that the present generation respect the elders a lot and keep their parents with them rather than sending them to old age homes. The western culture encourages kids to enjoy the freedom which they are granted at a younger stage of life. the kids are free to choose what they want to do with their life. The present generation are not taking care of their parents when they attain old age since the respect towards them must be sowed upon their hearts when they are small. A recent incident in New York caught the headlines where a school goer had filed a case against his own parents stating that he was molested for attaining lower grades in school. The future generations need the liberalism which is required to build their careers on their own. The moral skills cannot be learnt with much freedom and needs to be learnt in a strict manner. The rules of behavior should be learnt along with life skills under a supervised condition and after the basic skills are learnt then the child is free to learn whatever suits him.
The regulations which a
small
schooler should follow has long
been debated
. In
some
parts of the Asian continent
parents
have a command on their children while in the western countries where the
rules
are liberal for the children and give more freedom at a younger age.

A child
is considered
as the future generation. They should learn moral
skills
at an early age
so
that they are more conscious at a later part of
life
. If they are obedient to their elders, then they continue respecting their elders when they reach adulthood. The recent survey in Asian countries revealed that the present generation respect the elders a lot and
keep
their
parents
with them
rather
than sending them to
old
age homes.

The western culture encourages kids to enjoy the freedom which they
are granted
at a younger stage of
life
.
the
kids are free to choose what they want to do with their
life
. The present generation are not taking care of their
parents
when they attain
old
age since the respect towards them
must
be sowed
upon their hearts when they are
small
. A recent incident in New York caught the headlines where a school goer had filed a case against his
own
parents
stating that he
was molested
for attaining lower grades in school.

The future generations need the liberalism which
is required
to build their careers on their
own
. The moral
skills
cannot be
learnt
with much freedom and needs to be
learnt
in a strict manner
.
The
rules
of behavior should be
learnt
along with
life
skills
under a supervised condition and after the basic
skills
are
learnt
then the child is free to learn whatever suits him.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay In some country’s children have very strict rules of behaviour, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. 2

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  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
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