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Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there? v.15

Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there? v. 15
Many countries rely on motorways as the main roads for speedy and efficient transportation because these are a very convenient way of travelling long distances. However, motorways have many negative aspects such as environmental and dangerous traffic. To solve this issue, the congestion fees and other alternative methods should be implemented. Motorways are the convenient and easiest way to travel for long journeys. For instance, in the US, if people take a normal road to travel from New York to Washington, it would probably take more than 10 hours whereas motorways can shorten it to 4 hours. This could be possible due to the motorways’ speeding limit is higher than the normal roads and it is the direct and closest roads. From this, the time to commute can be reduced by more than half and this time can be used for other activities. Therefore, motorways are the most efficient transportation ways. In contrast, motorways produce massive congestion and environmental damages. Since majority of cars would be willing to access these roads to take the advantage of speedy and convenient way of travel, the roads will be suffered from traffic jams. In addition to this, the massive traffic jams would have a significant impact on environments to be damaged. The massive carbon dioxide and toxic emissions released from each vehicle will be gathered at atmosphere to create global warnings. The global warnings has impacted the earth drastically as the earth cycle has been distorted. Therefore, the immediate solutions seem required. Even though there are several ways to solve this issue, the most effective way could be the charging the congestion fees. For example, the roads between New York and Washington are connected by motorways only and in 2015 surveyed that more than 18 billion cars have passed per month. In the UK, after the congestion fess has been introduced, the number of cars using the motorways reduced by half and they expected to be continue. Thus, the congestion fee can be the effective way to solve this issue. Also, other alternative methods should be sought to reduce the number of cars using motorways. The government can provide the mandatory programs for road safety to all drivers so that they can acknowledge of circumstances of using motorways. The governmental programs should be used along with the congestion fees so that the motorway usage can be dropped. In conclusion, motorways have several advantages for drivers reaching the destination faster and convenient ways. However, there is a dark side of this, which are the congestion and environmental issues and which can be solved by congestion fees and governmental programs.
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countries rely on motorways as the main
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for speedy and efficient transportation
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because
these are a
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convenient
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of travelling long distances.
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many
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negative
aspects such as environmental and
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dangerous
traffic. To solve this issue, the
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congestion
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fees
and other alternative methods should
be implemented
.

Motorways are the
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convenient
and easiest
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way
to travel for long journeys.
For instance
, in the US, if
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people
take a normal
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road
to travel from New York to Washington, it would
probably
take more than 10 hours whereas motorways can shorten it to 4 hours. This could be possible due to the motorways’ speeding limit is higher than the normal
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roads
and it is the direct and closest
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roads
. From this, the time to commute can be
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reduced
by more than half and this time can be
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used
for other activities.
Therefore
, motorways are the most efficient transportation ways.

In contrast
, motorways produce massive
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congestion
and environmental damages. Since
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majority of
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cars
would be willing to access these
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roads
to take the advantage of speedy and
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convenient
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way
of travel, the
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roads
will
be suffered
from traffic jams.
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to this, the massive traffic jams would have a significant impact on environments to
be damaged
. The massive carbon dioxide and toxic emissions released from each vehicle will
be gathered
at atmosphere to create global warnings. The global warnings
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has
impacted the earth
drastically
as the earth cycle has
been distorted
.
Therefore
, the immediate solutions seem required.

Even though
there are several
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ways
to solve this issue, the most effective
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way
could be the charging the
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congestion
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fees
.
For example
, the
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roads
between New York and Washington
are connected
by motorways
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only
and in 2015 surveyed that more than 18 billion
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cars
have passed per month. In the UK, after the
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congestion
fess has
been introduced
, the number of
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cars
using the motorways
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reduced
by
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half and
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continue
.
Thus
, the
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congestion
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fee
can be the effective
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way
to solve this issue.

Also
, other alternative methods should
be sought
to
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reduce
the number of
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cars
using motorways. The
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government
can provide the mandatory programs for
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road
safety to all drivers
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so
that they can acknowledge of circumstances of using motorways. The governmental programs should be
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used
along with the
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congestion
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fees
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so
that the motorway usage can
be dropped
.

In conclusion
, motorways have several advantages for drivers reaching the destination faster and
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convenient
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ways
.
However
, there is a dark side of this, which are the
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congestion
and environmental issues and which can
be solved
by
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congestion
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fees
and governmental programs.
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IELTS essay Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there? v. 15

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
435 words
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