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Do you agree or diagree with the following statemnt? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from travelling to foreign countries. Use specific reasons and examples. v.1

Do you agree or diagree with the following statemnt? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from travelling to foreign countries. Use specific reasons and examples. v. 1
Teachers are the vital personalities in anyone's life. Communication and articulation are the key capabilities a teacher requires. Not all the teachers are born with these skills, due to which it becomes mandatory for teachers to attend many training courses, so that they can impart the knowledge effectively. In my perspective, it is important for a teacher to enhance her skills. Through this essay, I will discuss both the views, whether the training is required or not. To begin with, many teachers are knowledgeable in their respective subjects, but somehow, students are not able to connect the dots and this is mainly due to the way teachers articulate. There are many courses available in the market, for example "Train the trainer program", which mainly covers the presentation and delivery skills. Moreover, there are a lot of changes happen in the financial world, it becomes important for teachers to brush up their skills according to the new guidelines. To illustrate, there are many teachers who are chartered accountants and if they will not attend the course on the newly implemented financial reporting standards, their knowledge will be considered as outdated. On the contrary, there are some subjects where people are aware that there will never be any change. For instance, if the teacher is only teaching the basics of accounting or mathematics, she would not require any training course and she can survive with the same skill forever. In my opinion, it is mandatory for teachers to attend training courses to update their knowledge, however, many teachers can get away with it, if their role is only limited to the basic logic of any subject.
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are the vital personalities in anyone's life. Communication and articulation are the key capabilities a
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teacher
requires. Not all the
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teachers
are born
with these
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skills
, due to which it becomes mandatory for
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teachers
to attend
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many
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training
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courses
,
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so
that they can impart the knowledge
effectively
. In my perspective, it is
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important
for a
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teacher
to enhance her
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skills
. Through this essay, I will discuss both the views, whether the
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training
is required
or not.

To
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begin
with,
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many
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teachers
are knowledgeable in their respective subjects,
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but
somehow, students are not able to connect the dots and this is
mainly
due to the way
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teachers
articulate. There are
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many
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courses
available in the market,
for example
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"
Train the trainer program
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, which
mainly
covers the presentation and delivery
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skills
.
Moreover
, there are
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a lot of
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changes
happen in the financial world, it becomes
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important
for
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teachers
to brush up their
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skills
according to the new guidelines. To illustrate, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
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teachers
who
are chartered
accountants and if they will not attend the
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course
on the
newly
implemented financial reporting standards, their knowledge will
be considered
as outdated.

On the contrary
, there are
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some
subjects where
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people
are aware that there will never be any
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change
.
For instance
, if the
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teacher
is
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only
teaching the basics of accounting or mathematics, she would not require any
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training
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course and
she can survive with the same
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skill
forever.

In my opinion, it is mandatory for
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teachers
to attend
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training
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
to update their knowledge,
however
,
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many
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teachers
can
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get
away with it, if their role is
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only
limited to the basic logic of any subject.
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IELTS essay Do you agree or diagree with the following statemnt? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from travelling to foreign countries. Use specific reasons and examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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