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If you had an entire month to do whatever you would like to do. What would it be? Include details and examples to support your selection. v.1

If you had an entire month to do whatever you would like to do. What would it be? Include details and examples to support your selection. v. 1
As the tourism industry is gaining more attention, according to some people the English language will become the only verbal communicative way around the world. While a single spoken communication system can damage other cultures massively, I believe that it will bring more financial gains by making interaction easy. The main drawback of English becoming a single interactive language is that it will harm other cultures. This is because people will no longer have the interest to practice their own language rather than English. As a result, they will lose contact with their native culture and will lose connection with their heritage. In this process, they will suffer from an identity crisis that will massively hurt their art and film industry. Nevertheless, one interactive language will lead to easy access to different countries and can lead to massive financial gain. Having one communication method will make the interaction much easier. In this era of globalization, if a country wants to widen its business, it must need to interact with other countries effectively. This is because typically the underdeveloped and developing countries are earning most of their revenues through exporting goods to developed countries. For example, the GDP growth of Bangladesh was 7% in 2019 due to the fact that they have exported a massive amount of garments goods to Canada and this become possible as they introduced English as a second language in their country. This is a clear indication that how the same verbal language can contribute to a country's economy. In conclusion, Although one language can hurt a nation's culture, I believe that it brings many financial advantages which can lead to the prosperity of a nation.
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the English
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verbal communicative way around the world. While a single spoken communication system can damage other
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cultures
massively
, I believe that it will bring more financial gains by making interaction easy.

The main drawback of English becoming a single interactive
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language
is that it will harm other
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cultures
. This is
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because
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people
will no longer have the interest to practice their
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language
rather
than English.
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, they will lose contact with their native
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culture
and will lose connection with their heritage. In this process, they will suffer from an identity crisis that will
massively
hurt their art and film industry.
Nevertheless
, one interactive
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language
will lead to easy access to
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different
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countries
and can lead to massive financial gain.

Having one communication method will
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make
the interaction much easier. In this era of globalization, if a
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country
wants to widen its business, it
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must
need to interact with other
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countries
effectively
. This is
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because
typically
the underdeveloped and developing
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countries
are earning most of their revenues through exporting
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goods
to developed
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countries
.
For example
, the GDP growth of Bangladesh was 7% in 2019 due to the fact that they have exported a massive amount of garments
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goods
to Canada and this become possible as they introduced English as a second
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language
in their
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country
. This is a
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clear
indication that how the same verbal
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language
can contribute to a country's economy.

In conclusion
, Although one
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language
can hurt a nation's
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culture
, I believe that it brings
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many
financial advantages which can lead to the prosperity of a nation.
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IELTS essay If you had an entire month to do whatever you would like to do. What would it be? Include details and examples to support your selection. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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