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Pollution is increasing day by day. What will you suggest to reduce the pollution? Give reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Pollution is increasing day by day. What will you suggest to reduce the pollution? Give reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
It has been observed that the average life expectancy has increased in the world of developed countries. This might result into various issues for individuals and the community as a whole, although there are some measures that can be taken to counter the impact of ageing people. Following essay will discuss the issues and adequate actions to be taken. One of the most common problems one faces with having an aged person is to cover their routine expenses. It exerts a lot of burden on an individual to bear all the costs of medications and other necessary expenses to keep them healthy. Furthermore, if we take into consideration the perspective of society, the ageing individuals do not give any input the country. They only consume and no return is given back to the economy. For example, they are not earning, many are entitled to pensions and other government schemes to aid the retired. In order to reduce the impact of this, people should be encouraged to marry early and give birth to children soon. This will increase the youth in society, hence resulting in a decrease in the number of aging people. Secondly, the government should amend the policies for funding the aged population, so that one should not just sit back and get the resources instead of doing something productive for the community. To conclude, I would say that the life expectancy is increasing and if adequate measures are not taken, this might result into a lot of issues for the economy and for the individuals as well.
It has
been observed
that the average life expectancy has increased in the world of
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developed countries
. This might result into various issues for
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individuals
and the community as a whole, although there are
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some
measures that can
be taken
to counter the impact of
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ageing
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people
. Following essay will discuss the issues and adequate actions to
be taken
.

One of the most common problems one faces with having an aged person is to cover their routine expenses. It exerts
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a lot of
burden on an
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individual
to bear all the costs of medications and other necessary expenses to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
them healthy.
Furthermore
, if we take into consideration the perspective of society, the
Possible spelling mistake. 'ageing' is British English.
ageing
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individuals
do not give any input the country. They
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only
consume and no return is
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given
back to the economy.
For example
, they are not earning,
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many
are entitled
to pensions and other
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government
schemes to aid the retired.

In order to
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reduce
the impact of this,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should
be encouraged
to marry early and give birth to children
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
. This will increase the youth in society,
hence
resulting in a decrease in the number of aging
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
Secondly
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should amend the policies for funding the aged population,
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so
that one should not
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just
sit back and
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get
the resources
instead
of doing something productive for the community.

To conclude
, I would say that the life expectancy is increasing and if adequate measures are not taken, this might result into
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
issues for the economy and for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
as well
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Pollution is increasing day by day. What will you suggest to reduce the pollution? Give reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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