Children should not have to work or help with household tasks; their only responsibility should be to study. v.2
Children should not have to work or help with household tasks; their only responsibility should be to study. v. 2
Nowadays, children are surrounded by a lot of information. Even though some people say that children ought to share duties at home, there are others who state kids need to acquire such amount of it. They have no time to provide their parents with some help. In my opinion, they need to study in order to pursue a high degree in their formation and knowledge for their future.
Admittedly, there are some advantages of helping the parents at home. First they can get learning from the tasks. Kids might acquire some skills helping the mother and the father. For instance, paying bills, preparing foods, organizing their belongs may rather help them in the future. Second, they acquire experience in sharing the duties at home.
However, still I support that children should only to study. They are involved in a plentiful of activities. In school they attend classes in the morning and extra classes in the afternoon. They have a great amount of lessons to study. In one hand, they should study so that they may be graduated. On the other hand, they are required to acquire enough knowledge to help them in pursuing another degree in some universities and to help them through their lives. Thus, a hard-working can somewhat help them to accomplish such goals.
Furthermore, children need to be prepared for the future. They have to acquire a good education. Not only may the teacher transmit the knowledge, but also their parents have to do it. In addition, kids can be engaged in study groups. For instance, they form groups with their classmates. Sometimes, even their classmates’ parents may probably provide pieces of important information. Therefore, they are surrounded by people who want to help them.
In conclusion, studies do not finish. The young men start studying in high school and they are supposed to finish it in university as a bachelor degree. However, after graduating comes a higher degree. Thus, it is not helping at home that they will accomplish that. Instead, those are reached just by studying.
Nowadays,
children
are surrounded
by
a lot of
information.
Even though
some
people
say that
children
ought to share duties at home, there are others who state kids need to
acquire
such amount of it. They have no time to provide their
parents
with
some
help
. In my opinion, they need to
study
in order to pursue a high
degree
in their formation and knowledge for their future.
Admittedly
, there are
some
advantages of helping the
parents
at home.
First
they can
get
learning from the tasks. Kids might
acquire
some
skills
helping the mother and the father.
For instance
, paying bills, preparing foods, organizing their belongs may
rather
help
them in the future. Second, they
acquire
experience in sharing the duties at home.
However
,
still
I support that
children
should
only
to
study
. They
are involved
in
a plentiful of
activities. In
school they
attend classes in the morning and extra classes in the afternoon. They have a great amount of lessons to
study
. In one hand, they should
study
so
that they may
be graduated
.
On the other hand
, they
are required
to
acquire
enough
knowledge to
help
them in pursuing another
degree
in
some
universities and to
help
them through their
lives
.
Thus
, a
hard
-working can somewhat
help
them to accomplish such goals.
Furthermore
,
children
need to
be prepared
for the future. They
have to
acquire
a
good
education. Not
only
may the teacher transmit the knowledge,
but
also
their
parents
have to
do it.
In addition
, kids can
be engaged
in
study
groups.
For instance
, they form groups with their classmates.
Sometimes
, even their classmates’
parents
may
probably
provide pieces of
important
information.
Therefore
, they
are surrounded
by
people
who want to
help
them.
In conclusion
,
studies
do not finish. The young
men
start
studying in high
school and
they
are supposed
to finish it in university as a bachelor
degree
.
However
, after graduating
comes
a higher
degree
.
Thus
, it is not helping at home that they will accomplish that.
Instead
, those
are reached
just
by studying.
20Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes