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Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? What are the drawbacks? v.9

Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad. What are the drawbacks? v. 9
Nowadays, most of the students have tendency to get their education abroad. Such choice can bring some advantages and disadvantages, which are considered in essay, as for students as and the countries. Firstly, foreign students bring money for the country. It is explained as students from the other places usually pay more money for course fees and living costs than dwellers’ students. Such trend can help universities develop and to be more famous and prestigious in the world. This is the main reason to invite people to get education at some universities. Secondly, diploma of education abroad is highly value in the mother country. So, students, who returned to the his country with foreign diploma, can get any suitable work with perfect salary. Thus, company usually find workers, who be able to study quickly. Also, employers sure that person, who can get education in the other country, can adapt in company too. For example, the firm “New Way” hires people, who have an education or internship abroad. On the other hand, the main problem for countries is ' brain drain' . Most of students, who receive an education abroad, as a rule come back to their country, where can find a necessary job. So, universities lose future potential scientists and workers, especially if they have a rare specialization, because it is extremely worth for government. For instance, Vladimir Nabokov was a brilliant graduate of university of Cambridge, who moved to USA and then returned to Russian Empire. In conclusion, i can say that students who get education abroad have benefits, and countries have benefits too despite on minor drawbacks. As for me, it is a good idea to get prestigious foreign diploma, because it give a chance to find appropriate job in any place of our planet.
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as and the countries.

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bring money for the
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. It is
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explained
as
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from the other places
usually
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students
. Such trend can
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help
universities develop and to be more
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famous
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Secondly
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is
highly
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.
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returned to the his
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with foreign diploma, can
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any suitable work with perfect salary.
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usually
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be able to study
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in the other
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, can adapt in
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too.
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,
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education
or internship abroad.

On the other hand
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receive an
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, as a
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back to their
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, where can find a necessary job.
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university of Cambridge
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moved
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to USA
and then returned to Russian Empire.

In conclusion
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can say that
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have benefits, and
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have benefits too despite on minor drawbacks. As for me, it is a
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good
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to
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prestigious foreign diploma,
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give
a chance to find appropriate job in any place of our planet.
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IELTS essay Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad. What are the drawbacks? v. 9

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
297 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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