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More attention is paid to being"responsible tourists" in order to preserve the cultural and environmental aspects of tourist places. However, some people think it is impossible to be a "responsible tourist" in the socie v.2

More attention is paid to being"responsible tourists" in order to preserve the cultural and environmental aspects of tourist places. However, some people think it is impossible to be a "responsible tourist" in the socie v. 2
People have different opinions on whether we could be ' responsible tourists' . I think it is possible for the government and individuals to make joint effort to be responsible for keeping the cultural and natural environment of the tourist destination. It is undeniably that tourists should build up the sense of protecting the tourist attractions they visit. Firstly, many attractions are precious cultural or environmental resources, some of which are even the World Heritage with tremendous value and significance. Those attractions are susceptible to some extent, which means that once they are undermined, the harmfulness is irreversible. Therefore, they should be delicately protected by tourists. Besides, local governments should introduce some law or policy to raise tourists' attention to preserve those places and individuals are also supposed to carry out their responsibilities while traveling. For example, uncivilised behaviour such as dropping litter about should be strictly prohibited or punished in order improve people' s awareness of environmental protection. However, some people argue that there are several factors which make it impossible to be a ' responsible tourist' . To begin with, they think that the damage of some tourist attractions are simply due to the industrialisation and the macro environmental change. Tourists can do little to alternate this situation. Furthermore, some popular attractions are so famous that it is impossible to avoid the overcrowding all the year round. Under such circumstance, even though all tourists are rule-abiding, it will also cause chronic damage to those places especially some ancient architecture or natural reserves. I think this issue is not insolvable and relevant managements should take measures to limit the maximum tourist number to mitigate this condition. In conclusion, as long as tourists and governments raise their sense of preservation and take positive actions to protect the tourist attractions, it is probably that more responsible tourists' will appear in the near future.
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government
and individuals to
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make
joint effort to be
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responsible
for keeping the cultural and natural environment of the
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tourist
destination.

It is
undeniably
that
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tourists
should build up the sense of protecting the
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tourist
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attractions
they visit.
Firstly
,
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many
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attractions
are precious cultural or environmental resources,
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some
of which are even the World Heritage with tremendous value and significance. Those
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attractions
are susceptible to
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some
extent, which means that once they
are undermined
, the harmfulness is irreversible.
Therefore
, they should be
delicately
protected by
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tourists
.
Besides
, local
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governments
should introduce
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some
law or policy to raise
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tourists&
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also
supposed to carry out their responsibilities while traveling.
For example
,
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uncivilised
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behaviour
such as dropping litter about should be
strictly
prohibited or punished in order
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improve
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people&
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However
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some
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people
argue that there are several factors which
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make
it impossible to be a '
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responsible
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tourist&
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with, they
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damage of
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tourist
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attractions
are
simply
due to the
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industrialisation
and the macro environmental
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.
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can do
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little
to alternate this situation.
Furthermore
,
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some
popular
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attractions
are
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so
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famous
that it is impossible to avoid the overcrowding all the year round. Under such circumstance,
even though
all
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tourists
are
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rule
-abiding, it will
also
cause chronic damage to those places
especially
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some
ancient architecture or natural reserves. I
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think
this issue is not insolvable and relevant managements should take measures to limit the maximum
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tourist
number to mitigate this condition.

In conclusion
, as long as
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tourists
and
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governments
raise their sense of preservation and take
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positive
actions to protect the
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tourist
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attractions
, it is
probably
that more
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responsible
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tourists&
#039; will appear in the near future.
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24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay More attention is paid to being"responsible tourists" in order to preserve the cultural and environmental aspects of tourist places. However, some people think it is impossible to be a "responsible tourist" in the socie v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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