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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production andpreservation outweigh the advantages? v.2

Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production andpreservation outweigh the advantages? v. 2
Most foods that are purchased these days in small stores and supermarkets have chemicals in them as these are used to improve production and ensure the food lasts for longer. However, there are concerns that these have harmful effects. In my opinion, the potential dangers from this are greater than the benefits we receive. There are several reasons why chemicals are placed in food. Firstly, it is to improve the product to the eye, and this is achieved via the use of colourings which encourage people to purchase food that may otherwise not look tempting to eat. Another reason is to preserve the food. Much of the food we eat would not actually last that long if it were not for chemicals they contain, so again this is an advantage to the companies that sell food as their products have a longer shelf life. From this evidence, it is clear to me that the main benefits are, therefore, to the companies and not to the customer. Although companies claim these food additives are safe and they have research to support this, the research is quite possibly biased as it comes from their own companies or people with connections to these companies. It is common to read reports these days in the press about possible links to various health issues such as cancer. Food additives have also been linked to problems such as hyperactivity in children. To conclude, despite the fact that there are benefits to placing chemicals in food, I believe that these principally help the companies but could be a danger to the public. It is unlikely that this practice can be stopped, so food must be clearly labelled and it is my hope that organic products will become more readily available at reasonable prices to all.
Most
foods
that are
purchased
these days in
small
stores and supermarkets have chemicals in

them
as these are
used
to
improve
production and ensure the
food
lasts for longer.
However
,

there are concerns that these have harmful effects. In my opinion, the potential
dangers


from
this are greater than the benefits we receive.

There are several reasons why chemicals
are placed
in
food
.
Firstly
, it is to
improve
the

product to the eye, and this
is achieved
via the
use
of
colourings
which encourage
people
to

purchase
food
that may
otherwise
not look tempting to eat. Another reason is to preserve
the


food
. Much of the
food
we eat would not actually last that long if it were not for
chemicals


they contain,
so
again this is an advantage to the
companies
that sell
food
as their products

have
a longer shelf life.

From this evidence, it is
clear
to me that the main benefits are,
therefore
, to the

companies
and not to the customer.
Although
companies
claim these
food
additives
are


safe and they have research to support this, the research is quite
possibly
biased as it

comes
from their
own
companies
or
people
with connections to these
companies
. It
is


common to read reports these days in the press about possible links to various health

issues
such as cancer.
Food
additives have
also
been linked
to problems such
as


hyperactivity
in children.

To conclude
, despite the fact that there are benefits to placing chemicals in
food
, I believe

that
these
principally
help
the
companies
but
could be a
danger
to the public. It
is


unlikely that this practice can be
stopped
,
so
food
must
be
clearly
labelled and it is my hope

that
organic products will become more
readily
available at reasonable prices to all.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Mistakes

IELTS essay Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production andpreservation outweigh the advantages? v. 2

Essay
  American English
21 paragraphs
298 words
5.5
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