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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages? v.6

Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages? v. 6
In the current world, usage of chemicals such as fertilizers and pesticides is having a negative impact on the human health. Not only for humans, but also for all creatures who consumes it are started facing dangers. It is clear that using chemicals have more disadvantages than advantages. The following essay state points to support the view. On the one hand, the main advantage of using harmful sprays in cultivation is that, it can be preserved for longer days without spoiling the products. It has been observed that, fruits and vegetables that are protected by these chemicals are feeling as fresh for more than 5 days and thus can be transferred to distant places. Additionally, these harsh sprays keep insects away and hence farmers get a good harvest. On the other hand, it has been noted that, continuous usage of food with the chemicals has an adverse impact on human health. Taking these poisons often leads to life long diseases like cancer, ulcer, heart problems. In some of the cultivation, farmers even inject chemicals in the roots of the plant to get a good result. For example, increasing the price of the pesticides can take as a proof for this. In Kerala, last year, there was a 2% increment in this field. People can't even wash away these chemicals using normal methods. As a result, they are ending up with feeding food having poisons. Furthermore, farmers are splashing fluids in the land before starting the planting. For the first time this gives good results, but the second time, they won't get a good result as these highly harmful fluids have already killed good bacteria. Additionally, they forms a cover above the field and prevent absorption of good gases and water into the soil. Consequently, it reduces the quality of the soil. In conclusion, applying chemicals in the food production and cultivation is having more drawbacks compare to the advantages. By considering this, we can start taking action to protect our environment and human beings from this.
In the
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current
world, usage of
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chemicals
such as fertilizers and pesticides is having a
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negative
impact on the
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human
health. Not
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only
for
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humans
,
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but
also
for all creatures who
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consumes
it are
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started
facing
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dangers
. It is
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clear
that using
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chemicals
have more disadvantages than advantages. The following essay state points to support the view.

On the one hand, the main advantage of using harmful sprays in cultivation is that, it can
be preserved
for longer days without spoiling the products. It has
been observed
that, fruits and vegetables that
are protected
by these
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chemicals
are feeling as fresh for more than 5 days and
thus
can
be transferred
to distant places.
Additionally
, these harsh sprays
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keep
insects away and
hence
farmers
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get
a
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good
harvest.

On the other hand
, it has
been noted
that, continuous usage of food with the
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chemicals
has an adverse impact on
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human
health. Taking these poisons
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often
leads to life long diseases like cancer, ulcer, heart problems. In
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some of the
cultivation, farmers even inject
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chemicals
in the roots of the plant to
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get
a
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good
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result
.
For example
, increasing the price of the pesticides can take as a proof for this. In Kerala, last year, there was a 2% increment in this field.
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People
can't even wash away these
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chemicals
using normal methods. As a
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result
, they are ending up with feeding food having poisons.

Furthermore
, farmers are splashing fluids in the land
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before
starting the planting. For the
first
time this gives
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good
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results
,
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but
the second time, they won't
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get
a
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good
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result
as these
highly
harmful fluids have already killed
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good
bacteria.
Additionally
, they
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forms
a cover above the field and
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prevent
absorption of
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good
gases and water into the soil.
Consequently
, it
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reduces
the quality of the soil.

In conclusion
, applying
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chemicals
in the food production and cultivation is having more drawbacks compare to the advantages. By considering this, we can
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start
taking action to protect our environment and
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human
beings from this.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages? v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
336 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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