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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages? v.5

Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages? v. 5
Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in feed production and preservation Outweigh the advantages? Most foods that are purchased, these days in small stores and supermarkets have chemicals In them as these are used to improve production and ensure the cuisine lasts for longer. However, there are concerns that these have harmful effects. In my opinion, the potential The dangers of this are greater than the benefits we receive. There are several reasons why chemicals are placed in fare. Firstly, it is to improve the Product into the eye, and this is achieved via the use of colourings which encourage people to Purchase bread that may otherwise not look tempting to eat. Another reason is to preserve The snack. Much of the bread we eat would not actually last that long if it were not for The chemicals they contain, so again this is an advantage to the companies that sell snacks as they're Products have a longer shelf life. From this evidence, it is clear to me that the main benefits are, therefore, to the companies And not to the customer. Although the companies claim these cuisine additives are safe and they Has research to support this, the research is quite possibly biased as it there from there Own companies or people with connections to these companies. It is common to read Reports these days in the press about possible links to various health issues such as cancer. Feed additives have also been linked to problems such as hyperactivity in children. To conclude, despite the fact that there are benefits to placing chemicals in foodstuff, I believe That these principally help the companies, but could be a danger to the public. It is unlikely That this practice can be stopped, so foodstuff must be clearly labelled and it is my hope that Organic products will become more readily available at reasonable prices to all.
Do the
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dangers
derived from the
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use
of
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chemicals
in feed production and preservation

Outweigh the advantages?

Most foods that are
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purchased
, these days in
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small
stores and supermarkets have chemicals

In them as these are
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used
to
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improve
production and ensure the cuisine lasts for longer.

However
, there are concerns that these have harmful effects. In my opinion, the
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potential


The
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dangers
of this are greater than the benefits we receive.

There are several reasons why
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chemicals
are placed
in fare.
Firstly
, it is to
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improve
the

Product into the eye, and this
is achieved
via the
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use
of
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colourings
which encourage
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people
to

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Purchase
bread that may
otherwise
not look tempting to eat. Another reason is to
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preserve


The snack. Much of the bread we eat would not actually last that long if it were not
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for


The
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chemicals
they contain,
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so
again this is an advantage to the
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companies
that sell snacks as they're

Products have a longer shelf life.

From this evidence, it is
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clear
to me that the main benefits are,
therefore
, to the
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companies


And not to the customer. Although the
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companies
claim these cuisine additives are safe and
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they


Has research to support this, the research is quite
possibly
biased as it there from there

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Own
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companies
or
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people
with connections to these
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companies
. It is common to
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read


Reports these days in the press about possible links to various health issues such as cancer.

Feed additives have
also
been linked
to problems such as hyperactivity in children.

To conclude
, despite the fact that there are benefits to placing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
chemicals
in foodstuff, I believe

That these
principally
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help
the
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companies
,
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but
could be a
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danger
to the public. It is
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unlikely


That this practice can be
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stopped
,
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so
foodstuff
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must
be
clearly
labelled and it is my hope that

Organic products will become more
readily
available at reasonable prices to all.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages? v. 5

Essay
  American English
22 paragraphs
318 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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