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Do agree or disagree? educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend time on technology? v.2

Do agree or disagree? educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend time on technology? v. 2
Reading a book is one of the most beneficial things we can do in our free time. Many people believe that one who reads a book has better imagination and language skills than the one who does not. I completely agree with the statement and this essay will discuss about the same. There is no denying the fact that people like to watch TV more than reading a book. A majority of people prefer to watch a movie or a TV series than reading a book. Many people believe that reading makes them sleepy. However, book readers know that reading not only improves our imagination but also improves our vocabulary, it also heals a broken heart. There are many good books available in the market which not only motivate us, but also tell us different ways to be successful. A book fills our minds with beautiful thoughts and improve our imagination power. Every successful motivational speaker is fond of reading books. For instance, in a recent survey conducted by a private organization, it was found that people who are fond of reading books can speak for longer duration as compared to the people who are not, in front of a crowd. Along with the imagination, it improves our language skills by improving our vocabulary. In conclusion, reading is the best source for improving imagination and language. TV is a great source of entertainment and keep us updated with the entire world, but it does not improve our language skills. We should read books in order to have a positive and healthy mind and we should encourage our children to do the same.
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is one of the most beneficial things we can do in our free time.
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than the one
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with the statement and this essay will
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people
like to
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watch
TV more than
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. A majority of
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people
prefer to
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book
.
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people
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readers know that
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available in the market which not
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motivate us,
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fills our minds with
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power. Every successful motivational speaker is fond of
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.
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can speak for longer duration as compared to the
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by improving our vocabulary.

In conclusion
,
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is the best source for improving
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. We should read
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positive
and healthy
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mind and
we should encourage our children to do the same.
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IELTS essay Do agree or disagree? educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend time on technology? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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