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5) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v.1

5) There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 1
Nowadays the majority of the students work part-time along with tertiary education. In my opinion, this is a positive trend as it is beneficial for the overall growth of an individual. The primary advantage of part-time job is that students become self-dependent. As we know that higher education costs a fortune and not everyone can afford it, therefore, it is certainly a good idea for the students to earn some money through part-time work to support their educational expenses. In this way, they can reduce the financial burden from their parents' shoulders. For instance, the students of London university admitted that they would not have completed their master's degree if they had not worked part-time. Another positive aspect of accepting part-time jobs while studying at the university is that the aspiring minds learn essential life-skills. Part-time employment offers early exposure to work-life and makes students efficient for future jobs, where such qualities are valued. For instance, pupils learn the value of money and to work on discipline when they have to follow certain guidelines at work and manage their budget. In addition to this, the experienced gained from part-time work make them competitive in the job market. As some employers prefer to hire candidates with related work experience, it opens up further opportunities for such students. To conclude, it is a valuable experience for the students to take up part-time jobs during university education because they get an opportunity to become more rounded as a person and earn some income to bear the burden of their educational expenses. By considering all these aspects, it is certainly a positive development and parents should encourage their children to do so.
Nowadays the majority of the
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students
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work
part-time along with tertiary education. In my opinion, this is a
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positive
trend as it is beneficial for the
overall
growth of an individual.

The primary advantage of part-time
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job
is that
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students
become self-dependent. As we know that higher education costs a fortune and not everyone can afford it,
therefore
, it is
certainly
a
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good
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idea
for the
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students
to earn
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some
money through part-time
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work
to support their educational expenses. In this way, they can
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reduce
the financial burden from their parents' shoulders.
For instance
, the
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students
of London university admitted that they would not have completed their master's degree if they had not worked part-time.

Another
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positive
aspect of accepting part-time
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jobs
while studying at the university is that the aspiring minds learn essential life-
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skills
. Part-time employment offers early exposure to work-life and
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makes
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students
efficient for future
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jobs
, where such qualities
are valued
.
For instance
, pupils learn the value of money and to
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work
on discipline when they
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have to
follow certain guidelines at
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work
and manage their budget.
In addition
to this, the experienced gained from part-time
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work
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make
them competitive in the
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job
market. As
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some
employers prefer to hire candidates with related
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work
experience, it opens up
further
opportunities for such students.

To conclude
, it is a valuable experience for the
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students
to take up part-time
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jobs
during university education
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because
they
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get
an opportunity to become more rounded as a person and earn
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some
income to bear the burden of their educational expenses. By considering all these aspects, it is
certainly
a
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positive
development and parents should encourage their children to do
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so
.
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IELTS essay 5) There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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