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Discuss when, if ever capital punishment can be viewed as a valid punishment for a crime. v.1

Discuss when, if ever capital punishment can be viewed as a valid punishment for a crime. v. 1
In the world we live in today, there are different views concerning Capital Punishment. Some would regard it as beneficial; however, some are sceptical about it. In this essay, both views will be discussed. There are those who do not agree with the death penalty for reasons such as police authorities could be mistaken "the real culprit" to "a culprit". In fact, there has been a situation before that the cops just wanted to prove that they have solved the case by picking up the one who they believed did the crime not knowing who actually did it. An example is the case of an Australian man named Mr. Johnson. He was prosecuted for committing murder and was hanged in the middle of the city-centre in Melbourne, but surprisingly, a week after his execution, a hesitant witness came out and pointed to the Victorian police who actually murdered the victim. This was a hot topic because of the public awareness, and this is the reason why such punishment is being disregarded. On the other hand, there are various people who believe in it because it could give peace and order in the society. For instance, here in the Philippines, crimes such as rape, murder, homicide, robbery and many types of it are being committed as evidence in Philippine TV news. So, people strongly believe that capital punishment is needed to bring back the peace and harmony in the country. Way back, during the term of late President Ferdinand E. Marcos, the death penalty was strictly imposed, whether the sinner was wealthy and powerful or not. An example is the famous Chinese drug lord who was executed by the country's firing squad and televised it to the public. As a result, Filipinos were afraid to do crimes and the Philippine has even featured in New York Times magazine as one of the best countries to live in. In conclusion, with regard to what I think, I believe that death penalty must be implemented. It is because heinous crimes are very rampant these days, but we need to examine deliberately and intensely who the real crime-committer is.
In the world we
live
in
today
, there are
different
views concerning Capital Punishment.
Some
would regard it as beneficial;
however
,
some
are
sceptical
about it. In this essay, both views will
be discussed
.

There are those
who
do not
agree
with the death penalty for reasons such as police authorities could
be mistaken
"
the real culprit
"
to
"
a culprit
"
. In fact, there has been a situation
before
that the cops
just
wanted to prove that they have solved the case by picking up the one
who
they believed did the
crime
not knowing
who
actually did it. An example is the case of an Australian
man
named Mr. Johnson. He
was prosecuted
for committing murder and
was hanged
in the middle of the
city-centre
in Melbourne,
but
surprisingly
, a week after his execution, a hesitant witness came out and pointed to the Victorian police
who
actually murdered the victim. This was a hot topic
because
of the public awareness, and this is the reason why such punishment is
being disregarded
.

On the other hand
, there are various
people
who
believe in it
because
it could give peace and order in the society.
For instance
, here in the Philippines,
crimes
such as rape, murder, homicide, robbery and
many
types of it are
being committed
as evidence in Philippine TV news.
So
,
people
strongly
believe that capital punishment
is needed
to bring back the peace and harmony in the country. Way back, during the term of late President Ferdinand E. Marcos, the death penalty was
strictly
imposed, whether the sinner was wealthy and powerful or not. An example is the
famous
Chinese drug lord
who
was executed
by the country's firing squad and televised it to the public.
As a result
, Filipinos were afraid to do
crimes
and the Philippine has even featured in New York Times magazine as one of the best countries to
live
in.

In conclusion
, with regard to what I
think
, I believe that death penalty
must
be implemented
. It is
because
heinous
crimes
are
very
rampant these days,
but
we need to examine
deliberately
and
intensely
who
the real crime-committer is.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Discuss when, if ever capital punishment can be viewed as a valid punishment for a crime. v. 1

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