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Digital communication technology, such as email, instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connections between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

Digital communication technology, such as email, instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connections between people. with this opinion? v. 1
With the advent of technological advances, interactions among humans have been made easier. However, would it also make connections and relationships among individuals easier, too? In this essay, I will argue that while digital communication may be convenient and popular, it cannot replace face-to-face communication. To begin with, communicating ways witness some obvious benefits thanks to such technology in terms of delivering speed and convenience. Specifically, thanks to instant messaging, human can receive messages from other side of the Earth in a fraction of second. Additionally, not only can individuals check messaging notifications wherever they are, but they also get unlimited words of texting. For instance, social media sites like Facebook, Instagram and Twitter gain strong prevalences in information spreading, attracting thousands of people due to its applications on keeping in touch with one another. Moreover, technology allows people to make video calls simulating direct talks, let alone texting with icons. However, better communication does not equal better connections when it comes to interacting during talks. Obviously, despite tangible advantages of technology on communication, digital conversations cannot be substitute for face-to-face communication. In fact, the more humans have online conversations, the less they will connect with others. Undeniably, non-verbal communication facilitates eye contact and body language, involving more expressions in communicating. Unfortunately, providing that individuals immerse in virtual talks, they will lose basic human skills of interacting. To conclude, this essay discussed how technological advances have improved communication, not connections. From my perspective, while the ways in which we interact with others have changed greatly thanks to current technology, such advances cannot replace non-verbal contact.
With the advent of technological advances, interactions among
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humans
have
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easier.
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, would it
also
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make
connections and relationships among individuals easier, too? In this essay, I will argue that while digital
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communication
may be convenient and popular, it cannot replace face-to-face communication.

To
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begin
with, communicating ways witness
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some
obvious benefits thanks to such
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technology
in terms of delivering speed and convenience.
Specifically
, thanks to instant messaging,
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human
can receive messages from other side of the Earth in a fraction of second.
Additionally
, not
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only
can individuals
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check
messaging notifications wherever they are,
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but
they
also
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get
unlimited words of texting.
For instance
, social media sites like Facebook, Instagram and Twitter gain strong
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prevalences
in information spreading, attracting thousands of
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people
due to its applications on keeping in touch with one another.
Moreover
,
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technology
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allows
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people
to
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make
video calls simulating direct talks,
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let
alone texting with icons.

However
, better
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communication
does not equal better connections when it
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comes
to interacting during talks.
Obviously
, despite tangible advantages of
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technology
on
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communication
, digital conversations cannot be
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substitute
for face-to-face
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communication
. In fact, the more
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humans
have online conversations, the less they will connect with others.
Undeniably
, non-verbal
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communication
facilitates eye contact and body language, involving more expressions in communicating. Unfortunately, providing that individuals immerse in virtual talks, they will lose basic
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human
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skills
of interacting.

To conclude
, this essay discussed how technological advances have
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improved
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communication
, not connections. From my perspective, while the ways in which we interact with others have
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changed
greatly
thanks to
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current
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technology
, such advances cannot replace non-verbal contact.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Digital communication technology, such as email, instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connections between people. with this opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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