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Digital communication technology, such has email, instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connections between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

Digital communication technology, such has email, instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connections between people. with this opinion? v. 1
It is often believed that the life of metropolitans is better. Many people claim that people can have a healthy life in the rural areas. I firmly believe that owing to thousand amenities, everyone has a priority to have a luxurious lifestyle which is possible in cities only, as backwards areas are giving a hard time to the natives in this modern era. On the one side, developed areas are having enormous facilities, for, for instance, electricity and transportation. In this technological world, people cannot survive without internet which is the primary source of the communication. Big cities are having an excellent network range, which is helpful for the student’s assignment and for office projects too. In the metro cities, transportation is not an issue; there are a huge range of vehicles, according to the comfort zone and paying capacity of each commuter. Even the market is available within the walking distance. On the flip side, in the undeveloped areas, individuals are facing various problems; especially they have to travel long even for the groceries. As the roads are not well constructed, and therefore, bus and train service is quite low. People are not able to travel regularly according to their comfort time; they need to schedule their things according to the limited transport service. Education and work opportunities are equal to zero, without work it is not possible to survive for a long time at any place, for them it becomes an urgency to move into other cities. In conclusion, I reiterate, society can face bit pollution in urban areas, but still numerous positive aspects are convincing to the man to stay in cities rather than living in the countryside. In this growing world, become are becoming more organic and it is also improving the city life in an efficient way. Government is paying more attention to the city areas as they are liked by everyone to relish his life.
It is
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often
believed that the
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life
of metropolitans is better.
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Many
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people
claim that
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people
can have a healthy
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life
in the rural
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areas
. I
firmly
believe that owing to
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thousand
amenities, everyone has a priority to have a luxurious lifestyle which is possible in
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cities
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only
, as backwards
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areas
are giving a
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hard
time to the natives in this modern era.

On the one side, developed
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areas
are having enormous facilities, for,
for instance
, electricity and transportation. In this technological world,
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people
cannot survive without internet which is the primary source of the communication.
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Big
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cities
are having an excellent network range, which is helpful for the student’s assignment and for office projects too. In the metro
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cities
, transportation is not an issue; there are a huge range of vehicles, according to the comfort zone and paying capacity of each commuter. Even the market is available within the walking distance.

On the flip side, in the undeveloped
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areas
, individuals are facing various problems;
especially
they
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have to
travel long even for the groceries. As the roads are not well constructed, and
therefore
, bus and train service is quite low.
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People
are not able to travel
regularly
according to their comfort time; they need to schedule their things according to the limited transport service. Education and work opportunities are equal to zero, without work it is not possible to survive for a long time at any place, for them it becomes an urgency to
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move
into other cities.

In conclusion
, I reiterate, society can face
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bit
pollution in urban
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areas
,
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but
still
numerous
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positive
aspects are convincing to the
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man
to stay in
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cities
rather
than living in the countryside. In this growing world, become are becoming more organic and it is
also
improving the city
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life
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in an efficient way
.
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Government
is paying more attention to the city
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areas
as they
are liked
by everyone to relish his
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life
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Digital communication technology, such has email, instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connections between people. with this opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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