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Developments of technology are causing environmental problems. Some people think the solution is that everyone should accept a simpler life, while other believe that technology can solve these problems. Discuss both view and give your opinion v.2

Developments of technology are causing environmental problems. Some people think the solution is that everyone should accept a simpler life, while other believe that technology can solve these problems. 2
The negative impact on environment caused by new forms of technology are becoming more serious. Although some people think that becoming less dependent on technology and living a simple life is only solution. In my opinion, I believe that there are innovations that could address those environmental issues. On the one hand, the use of fossil fuels in industry, agriculture and other human activities is a cause of the dramatically increase of the total amount of carbon dioxide in atmosphere which is the culprit of various negative consequence such as global warming and the enhanced greenhouse effect (greenhouse effect is a natural phenomenon); even the most uninformed people could realize that. A typical example of this perception is the Earth Hour campaign, which is a symbolic action to encourage individuals, organizations and communities to turn off the electrical lights for one hour and raise awareness of society about saving energy and reducing the environmental issues caused by the electrical devices. On the other hand, the innovations in technology in the last decade have contributed to environmental protection. First, to cut carbon emissions, scientists have invented various products which are eco- friendly such as the electric car. Second, many new inventions and discoveries in technology are used to create new materials and solutions to alleviate plastic pollution which is a big burden on the ecosystems, nowadays. A concrete example is a new discovery of an enzyme in body structure of a worm. This worm can digest plastic, using it for food. Breeding this worm for use garbage processing will prevent over 5 billion tons of unrecyclable plastic from polluting the environment. Taking all of this into account, the simpler life is not the unique choice to prevent the environmental issues because the advances in technology in the future could tackle these problems.
The
negative
impact on environment caused by
new
forms of
technology
are becoming more serious. Although
some
people
think
that becoming less dependent on
technology
and living a simple life is
only
solution. In my opinion, I believe that there are innovations that could address those
environmental
issues.

On the one hand, the
use
of fossil fuels in industry, agriculture and other human activities is a cause of the
dramatically
increase of the total amount of carbon dioxide in atmosphere which is the culprit of various
negative
consequence such as global warming and the enhanced greenhouse effect (greenhouse effect is a natural phenomenon); even the most uninformed
people
could realize that. A typical example of this perception is the Earth Hour campaign, which is a symbolic action to encourage individuals, organizations and communities to turn off the electrical lights for one hour and raise awareness of society about saving energy and reducing the
environmental
issues caused by the electrical devices.

On the other hand
, the innovations in
technology
in the last decade have contributed to
environmental
protection.
First
, to
cut
carbon emissions, scientists have invented various products which are
eco
- friendly such as the electric car. Second,
many
new
inventions and discoveries in
technology
are
used
to create
new
materials and solutions to alleviate plastic pollution which is a
big
burden on the ecosystems, nowadays. A concrete example is a
new
discovery of an enzyme in body structure of a worm. This worm can digest plastic, using it for food. Breeding this worm for
use
garbage processing will
prevent
over 5 billion tons of
unrecyclable
plastic from polluting the environment.

Taking all of this into account, the simpler life is not the unique choice to
prevent
the
environmental
issues
because
the advances in
technology
in the future could tackle these problems.
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13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Developments of technology are causing environmental problems. Some people think the solution is that everyone should accept a simpler life, while other believe that technology can solve these problems. 2

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