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"Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming? ". v.5

"Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming? ". v. 5
Climate change is fast becoming a front burning issue and as such, taken the centre stage at various international forums on the Environment. It is in my view that these issues be backed up with the attendant action plan it deserves to nip the impending dangers in the bud. To start with, measures must be taken to identify and discourage the various economic activities that result in the burning of greenhouse gases. Some of these activities include continuous flaring of gas by petrol chemical industries, usage of highly combustible engines that release unsafe levels of hydrocarbons into the atmosphere which also aid in the depletion of the ozone layer. In addition, unregulated felling of trees should be discouraged as the action could lead to deforestation. Another point to consider is for the various governments to explore and develop the usage of renewable energy such as solar, wind and hydro power. These forms of energy are also refered to as clean energy. Furthermore, tree planting exercises should be embarked upon at all levels to help combat deforestation. It is worthy to note that many nations of the world have embraced the tree planting exercises and some have even gone ahead to set various targets to encourage the growing of trees. These actions would stem the tide of desertification which is also an offshoot of global warming. In conclusion, the battle to save the world from the dangers of climate change is a responsibility for all and as such, must be faced headlong.
Climate
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change
is
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fast
becoming a front burning issue and as such, taken the
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centre
stage at
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various
international forums on the Environment. It is in my view that these issues
be backed
up with the attendant action plan it deserves to nip the impending
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dangers
in the bud.

To
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start
with, measures
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must
be taken
to identify and discourage the
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various
economic activities that result in the burning of greenhouse gases.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
of these activities include continuous flaring of gas by petrol chemical industries, usage of
highly
combustible engines that release unsafe levels of hydrocarbons into the atmosphere which
also
aid in the depletion of the ozone layer.
In addition
, unregulated felling of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
should
be discouraged
as the action could lead to deforestation.

Another point to consider is for the
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various
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governments
to explore and develop the usage of renewable energy such as solar, wind and
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hydro power
. These forms of energy are
also
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refered
to as clean energy.
Furthermore
,
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tree
planting exercises should
be embarked
upon at all levels to
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help
combat deforestation. It is worthy to note that
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many
nations of the world have embraced the
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tree
planting exercises and
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some
have even gone ahead to set
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
targets to encourage the growing of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
. These actions would stem the tide of desertification which is
also
an offshoot of global warming.

In conclusion
, the battle to save the world from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
dangers
of climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
is a responsibility for all and as such,
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must
be faced
headlong.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay "Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming? ". v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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