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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.3

A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. with this opinion? v. 3
A group of individuals claims that the large of budget might possibly be considered as a tool to evaluate the values of a person rather than their characteristics. In my opinion, I completely disagree with the above notion since there are a number of aspects that people should highly appreciate to judge one’s worth. There is no doubt that various celebrities might not be paid tribute by others even though they possess a large of real states and cash. The recent studies reported that some of famous people could not be given the forgiveness from fans after serious sandals such as portrayed with lovers or treat others so bad and others. This could intensively reduce the number of followers on social networks and leave others a negative impression on those. As a result, celebrities might be overlooked and judged as a lower educated individual rather than being respectful because of their money. Moreover, the well behavior and attitude could support people to reach to a new peak among daily routines and career. It is undeniable that employees who are more likely to treat kindly and give others the reliability might be appreciated much into the important position in an organization even though their account experienced a low-income in the bank. Since the characteristics of those could offer the satisfaction to partners and managers such as sense of honour and trust, staffs could easily convince others to follow the common vision and lead a team to achieve certain successes. To illustrate, Bill gate have been ranked as one of the most influent billionaires by his creation of Microsoft word in the whole world. Not only by personal achievements, he also was evaluated as a wise and charming person when funding much money to the charity and voluntary programs in order to help children be developed in a better living environment In conclusion, I consider that the worth of individuals might be evaluated by different aspects rather than one’s possession. Besides, the government needs to educate more people to treat fairly with each other in order to improve the distance of social classes
A group of individuals claims that the large of budget
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might
possibly
be considered
as a tool to evaluate the values of a person
rather
than their characteristics. In my opinion, I completely disagree with the above notion since there are a number of aspects that
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people
should
highly
The verb 'appreciate' is used with the gerund form: "appreciate judging".
appreciate to judge
one’s worth.

There is no doubt that various celebrities
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might
not
be paid
tribute by others
even though
they possess a large of real states and cash. The recent studies reported that
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some
of
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famous
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people
could not be
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given
the forgiveness from fans after serious sandals such as portrayed with lovers or treat others
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so
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bad
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and others
. This could
intensively
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reduce
the number of followers on social networks and
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leave
others a
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negative
impression on those.
As a result
, celebrities
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might
be overlooked
and judged as a lower educated individual
rather
than being respectful
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because
of their money.

Moreover
, the well behavior and attitude could support
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people
to reach to a new peak among daily routines and career. It is undeniable that employees who are more likely to treat kindly and give others the reliability
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might
be appreciated
much into the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
position in an organization
even though
their account experienced a low-income in the bank. Since the characteristics of those could offer the satisfaction to partners and managers such as sense of
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honour
and trust, staffs could
easily
convince others to follow the common vision and lead a team to achieve certain successes. To illustrate, Bill gate have
been ranked
as one of the most
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influent
billionaires by his creation of
Did you mean the proper noun "Microsoft Word" (= Microsoft product)?
Microsoft word
in the whole world. Not
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only
by personal achievements, he
also
was evaluated
as a wise and charming person when funding much money to the charity and voluntary programs in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
children
be developed
in a better living
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environment


In conclusion
, I consider that the worth of individuals
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might
be evaluated
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
aspects
rather
than one’s possession.
Besides
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
needs to educate more
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people
to treat
fairly
with each
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other
in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the distance of social classes
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. with this opinion? v. 3

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  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
6.0
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